I had to write an essay on an extraordinary person. So i picked obama. I also had to write it in THIRD PERSON. If you could check out my essay before i turn it in to my teacher that would be great. Like tell me what you think, what i shoudl add, or what i should delete. Please give me tips, i really want a good grade. Please!
The extraordinary could be anyone, someone that is known or someone that is an idol. An extraordinary person can be a celebrity, actor, actress, or just somebody that is well known. That person is somebody that can be looked up too. There are many extraordinary people in the world; the remarkable, the brave, the people who change other's lives in an instant or a lifetime. President Barack Obama meets all those characteristics, which are why he is extraordinary.
Obama is an inspirational role model for many Americans and also citizens of other countries as well. He is the first African-American to run for President of the United States. That鈥檚 really brave to run for president as a black man, knowing that he could be assassinated any second of the day. He is a hard worker.
Before he first started running for president, Obama had made plans to make America a better country. His plans are equal to everyone, such as Obama has many plans to make America a better country than it has been these past nine years. Some of his plans are better health care, ending war in Iraq, better jobs for people, everyone being able to get a college education, and to protecting Medicare for senior citizens. Obama is a very admiring person because he opposes the war in Iraq, by courageously sticking to his position when others name him as unpatriotic.
Many African-Americans look up to Obama, because he has the same nationality as them. Not many African 鈥揂mericans have had the respect that whites have had. It's a comfort to them to think that the head of all authority is has the same color skin as them. He, being an African American is important because he gives a voice to millions of powerless African American. He is trying to overcome the effects of centuries, racism, and also continue the tradition of civil rights. Obama can relate to what they are and all the prejudice that comes along with it. He's black, and it shows them that black people can get somewhere in life and that they can make something out of themselves.
Who would have thought in a million years that a black man would run for the President of the United States? He is a brave man and that鈥檚 what makes him an extraordinary person. Obama has made a major difference in many people鈥檚 lives. He has inspired many people in this world, especially African-Americans. For the first time, he is trying to introduce changes that will help millions of Americans. Some of his plans have already been accomplished and hopefully many more of his plans will be in the future.
Will you read my essay and check for any errors, please!?
remember that obama is half white... and it seems like your just concentrating on the color of his skin. i think you need to name more of his accomplishments and and what he can do to the country. dont just concentrate on that he is HALF black.
Will you read my essay and check for any errors, please!?
Obama has not made a difference in anyone's lives.
Obama has raised taxes
Obama has hired czars that have not payed their taxes
His health care plan will not help
He has claimed the stimulus package to give jobs.
that didn't work
African Americans are not powerless and have many rights now
His half brother in Kenya is very poor and he doesn't give anything to him.
Obama wants the people who work to pay for the people who choose not to.
The taxpayers are forced to bail out companies who messed themselves up.
HE IS NOT HELPING THIS COUNTRY!
I am not racist, i just have an opinion.
