Saturday 24 September 2011

I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?

Nowadays, along with the development of technology, some people are confused whether they are still in charge of technology or not. Furthermore, many films have already described a war between human being and robot in the future. Can it become reality? A large number of people tend to live under the illusion that men are able to control technology. However, other people express a strong desire to state that technology will be out of control in one day.



Despite of the rapid evolution, technology is based on human being鈥檚 knowledge all the time. Without the advanced knowledge and science, technology can鈥檛 create such a tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on people鈥檚 purpose. Hence, people exert great effects on technology, which directly determine that human will always drive the change of technology.



Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is necessary. It is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an extreme essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, for example, using car in stead of walk, talking with neighbour by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to use kinds of technology to replace the traditional life style. It must be admitted that majority of people can鈥檛 live without modern technology.



From what has been discussed above, people should utilize technology in an appropriate way, not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without mobile, car, and computer. How to deal with the relationship between technology and life is important to everyone.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
I have proofread your paragraphs thoroughly. You did an excellent job, but I have made many changes. I have to admit that there were a few sentences that I did not understand (not many) and I did the best I could with those. I hope I did not change your meaning in those cases, so you should proofread my proofreading. The only thing I did nothing about was that you use the word technology a lot--too much, in fact. I am sending you a link for a thesaurus which will give you different words that you can substitute. I would rather you do this because you know exactly what you want to say better than I do. However, you really did an excellent job and you should be very proud of yourself. I've tried to learn other languages and I can't do anything compared to what you have done. Best of luck to you.



As technology develops, some people become confused about whether or not they are still in charge of technology. Furthermore, many films have already described a war between human beings and robots in the future. Can it become reality? A large number of people tend to live under the illusion that men are able to control technology. However, others express a strong belief that technology will be out of control in one day.



Technology is based upon what we know at any given time. Without advanced knowledge of science, technology can鈥檛 make tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on what purposes need to be served. Hence, people exert great effects on what they want to accomplish, which is assurance that humans will always drive the change of technology.



Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is logical. There is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, For example, they will a car instead of walking, they talk with neighbours by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to replace what they have traditionally done with newer life styles. It must be admitted that majority of people cannot live without modern technology.



From this discussion, this writer believes that people should utilize technology in an controlled way, and not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without telephones, cars, or computers. We must all learn how to deal with the relationship between technology and life.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
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You did an excellent job there is nothing to correct. If I were your teacher I would give you an A++++++++
human being's shudnt have a s after being other than that it looks like a A GRADE essay
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other people express a strong desire to state that technology will be out of control one day