please tell me how it sounds if i need to make changes or add more please help it needs to be 7 pages and its barly like 3 pages so help
For years many scientists believed that cloning would never be possible. Until February of 1997, when it was introduced from the biotechnology firm PPL Therapeutics and the Roslin Institute of Edinburgh, Scotland had successfully cloned a Finn Dorset sheep named Dolly. Dolly was born on July 5, 1996. she was named after the country-western singer Dolly Parton. Dolly had the DNA of her source; making her the first mammal successfully cloned using adult cells. Dolly was put to sleep February 14, 2003 after doctors detected lung disease, though she had reached half the life span of a typical sheep. Scientists are now looking to human cloning. Some experts believe that cloning should not even be attempted, and I agree with them. My reason is because think of all the side effects of cloning. Do you really think cloned food is safe for your children to eat?
One of the biggest side effects of cloning is that the technology is still so uncertain. Scientists are still unsure of any genetic mutations that might occur when cloning an animal or even a human. When I refer to cloning I’m discuss all types of cloning from animals to humans. Technology cannot solve everything. When they cloned Dolly, it resulted in the death of many embryos and newborns before they even achieved their success in Dolly. What I mean is that the experiment of Dolly started with 277 fused eggs, of which only 29 became embryos. Then all of the embryos were then transferred to 13 sheep and only 1 became pregnant with Dolly. So even if the human clone survives it’s not guaranteed that it would develop normally or have the same life span as a normal human.
The lost of gene diversity is another side effect of cloning. Gene diversity keeps an entire species from being wiped out by a singular virus if none of them have natural immunities. So this is due to the lack of gene diversity. Gene mutations happen naturally; this is why some people are taller, shorter, or more athletic than others. Basically humans can live on Earth relies on the diversity of genes.
Leading to extinction is another disadvantage of cloning. The reason is if we clone humans then we will all be identical. If everyone has the same type of genes, then this negative effect of cloning would be inbreeding. Since everyone has the same genotype they will continue to reproduce themselves. This will then lead us to our own extinction.
Another side effect of cloning is that there are a lot of ethical considerations and that would cause most people to protest. One of these ethical concerns is that cloning is “Playing God.” When a species begins to tinker with the ways of nature it seals its own fate. Let's say for example that a child learns he or she was a clone. Cloning is taking the work of God into our own hands, and playing God violates every religion in the book. Ethics can be twisted and warped to your liking if you can find a perfectly fine reason to do so. One thing though is, if we don’t carefully question our actions before we make them, then the consequences could be devastating. Everything has a reason, and only God knows what that is. There is a passage in the Bible that talks directly on the issue of men playing God. From Genesis, when Adam and Eve where thrown out of the Garden of Eden for taking fruit from the tree of knowledge and presuming to obtain God’s wisdom.
Another reason is that it will be very expensive and that money could be used for something useful like saving people’s lives and improving quality of life. It could even be used for food for the needy, homeless shelters, foreign aid, healthcare for those without insurance and especially to the schools.
How does my research paper sound so far?
Your essay right now is very good, but most persuasive essays have a paragraph in which they rebute a point that the opposing team can make. For example, the opposing side can say that cloning food is the only way to feed the hungry if the population still keeps growing as fast as it is now. Then you would have to rebute this argument and say that we could use the money for cloning, and turn it into making new technologies that will make food production more efficient. Just a suggestion, but otherwise your essay is very good.
Saturday 24 September 2011
What proof is there to deny the existence of GOD?
Every time I see that Atheist's are asking the Theists to prove the existence of GOD but what proof they have to deny it? Before going into any detail, let us read this article about an Atheist:
Dec. 9, 2004 - A British philosophy professor who has been a leading champion of atheism for more than a half-century has changed his mind. He now believes in God more or less based on scientific evidence, and says so on a video released Thursday.
At age 81, after decades of insisting belief is a mistake, Antony Flew has concluded that some sort of intelligence or first cause must have created the universe. A super-intelligence is the only good explanation for the origin of life and the complexity of nature, Flew said in a telephone interview from England.
Flew said he’s best labeled atheist like Thomas Jefferson, whose God was not actively involved in people’s lives.
“I’m thinking of a God very different from the God of the Christian and far and away from the God of Islam, because both are depicted as omnipotent Oriental despots, cosmic Hussein'susseins,” he said. “It could be a person in the sense of a being that has intelligence and a purpose, I suppose.”
Flew first made his mark with the 1950 article “Theology and Falsification,” based on a paper for the Socratic Club, a weekly Oxford religious forum led by writer and Christian thinker C.S. Lewis.
Over the years, Flew proclaimed the lack of evidence for God while teaching at Oxford, Aberdeen, Keele, and Reading universities in Britain, in visits to numerous U.S. and Canadian campuses and in books, articles, lectures and debates.
The philosopher Anthony Flew took almost his Life to know the truth about GOD, how long will an ordinary Atheist will take time to understand the truth ? A Life or Two?
What proof is there to deny the existence of GOD?
There is no evidence either way.
It is a pointless discussion.
Love and blessings Don
What proof is there to deny the existence of GOD?
Anyone that believes in the supernatural like a God and claims that it is real must shoulder the burden of proving its existence with empirical evidence in the first place. Not the other way round.
You can't disprove a negative.
I conjecture the existence of the Invisible Pink Unicorn.
Please give evidence that there is no such thing, before you go denying it.
It all comes back to the burden of proof and not proving negatives.
If anything which can not be proved were assumed to be true, lord only knows how the judicial system would work...
okay... 1 person becomes a spiritual deist.
is that all?
One case of an atheist turning into a theist doesn't change universal facts. How about tons of example of atheists who once believed in God all though their lives but later left theism when they understood the lack of evidence supporting the supposed existence of a higher power?
I believe I, who was a theist for 17 years, am not the only example in that department.
And you didn't cite any evidence supporting the supposed existence of God here either.
Logical Error: Burden of Proof is on the Existential Claim.
Logical Error: Absent evidence, non-existence is the default logical claim.
Logical Error: Appeal to Authority.
Logical Error: Confirmation Bias.
You can't prove something that's already proven. The burden of proof is on the theist, as they say.
Yeah, dude, I am still looking for said %26quot;proof%26quot;.
There are no gods and the Christian version of a three-in-one god is simply laughable.
Taoist/Atheist (realist)
Typical theist view, we can't explain it so it must be god.
And I wouldn't hinge my argument on what some philosophy professor says.
Your question is a negative assertion, that is to say, you cannot prove the non-existence of something.
My 81 year old mother thought people were living her attic.Do you get my point.You can not prove things do not exist.Some would say the absence of proof god does exist is proof that he does not.But stick to your guns.I wish I believed.A life after this one.What a wonderful thought.
1. If a perfectly good god exists, then evil does not.
2. There is evil in the world.
3. Therefore, a perfectly good god does not exist.
Theres no proof that god is real, and theres no proof to deny his existance.
Flew isn't a theist, either.
%26quot;Remember this every time some apologist brings up the name of Flew to argue against atheism: this is an example of the depths to which desperate Christians will sink — they will lie and take advantage of the confusion of an old man to get a trophy for their wall. %26quot;
There is no excuse for denying the Lord.
%26quot;The fool says in his heart, %26quot;There is no God.%26quot; They are corrupt, their deeds are vile; there is no one who does good.%26quot; Psalm 14:1
%26quot;Who is the liar? It is the man who denies that Jesus is the Christ. Such a man is the antichrist--he denies the Father and the Son.%26quot; -1 John 2:22
Leprechauns created the universe
That's why all the plants are green
You should just accept it and forget all this God/Jesus nonsense.
Arguments from authority are a FALLACY.
Just because some old codgers get scared in their final days does not prove there is a god.
http://www.nizkor.org/features/fallacies…
The onus is on Christians et al,to prove the existence of %26quot;God%26quot;.
In the same way,the prosecution in a court of law must prove guilt.
Simply quoting one man,who changed his mind,does not make every Atheist wrong.
Well done idiot. You've claimed that because one atheist changed his religion when he reached 81 (and, it must be noted, a few years after he was diagnosed with DEMENTIA), that somehow means that God must be real.
Your stupidity is so vast it doesn't amuse me; it actually OFFENDS me as another human being.
There is no proof either way - faith is the only thing we have to base an opinion of this nature on. I find it interesting however that at such a feeble age this man wants to recant his life's work and go with %26quot;The Big Guy%26quot;.
ok...if every christian, jew, muslim, or any other religious group that believed in a god, stopped and prayed all together that god would stop and cure all those sickened by lets just say cancer, would that happen? what did jesus say about prayer?......or if everyone who said they would sell their soul to the devil if they would hit the lottery or hit the big money in a casino, wouldn't there be a lot more people with money?......that is just part of my proof and there is a lot more.....
Appeal to authority fallacy. What Flew or anyone else believes is irrelevant -- what matters is evidence. And there is none to show your god (or anyone else's) is real.
That alone, the complete lack of evidence to show there IS a god, is ample basis for ignoring those who make claims about gods existing. It's quite easy, however, to go further with specific gods.
For example, your christian god claims, in Matt. 17:20, that with just a tiny bit of faith you can command a mountain to move, and it will move...and nothing will be impossible for you. So go ahead, go command a mountain to move -- does it? Nope. Nobody's ever been able to pull off that trick. Try something that's impossible to everybody else, like levitating yourself 10 feet off the ground with no mechanical aid...can you do it? Nope. Things that are impossible to everybody else are also impossible to you. All such tests -- every single one -- from the bible fail, every single time. That only leaves two conclusions:
1. the christian god/jesus lies, and doesn't keep promises -- so is no god.
2. the christian god/jesus can't keep promises because they don't exist
Which is it?
Until Flew (or anybody else) has *evidence* that a %26quot;super-intelligence%26quot; exists, there's no reason to believe one does -- he's stating an argument from ignorance. Same goes for your god.
Peace.
There is exactly the same amount of proof denying gods existence, as there is proving his existence!! I think most atheists do not deny the existence or possibility of some %26quot;force%26quot; or creator of existence in the universe. They just deny the existence of the christian, muslim, hindi, buddhist ideas of god, because they are all manmade interpretations of what god is and what god wants. So, its not really the denial that a god may exist, but rather, that he has not revealed himself to us and doesnt care to be worshipped!
The flowers are beautiful and smells good for the bees to find them easily. And there are too many spots on the leopar to make us to differ him from the lion.
Dec. 9, 2004 - A British philosophy professor who has been a leading champion of atheism for more than a half-century has changed his mind. He now believes in God more or less based on scientific evidence, and says so on a video released Thursday.
At age 81, after decades of insisting belief is a mistake, Antony Flew has concluded that some sort of intelligence or first cause must have created the universe. A super-intelligence is the only good explanation for the origin of life and the complexity of nature, Flew said in a telephone interview from England.
Flew said he’s best labeled atheist like Thomas Jefferson, whose God was not actively involved in people’s lives.
“I’m thinking of a God very different from the God of the Christian and far and away from the God of Islam, because both are depicted as omnipotent Oriental despots, cosmic Hussein'susseins,” he said. “It could be a person in the sense of a being that has intelligence and a purpose, I suppose.”
Flew first made his mark with the 1950 article “Theology and Falsification,” based on a paper for the Socratic Club, a weekly Oxford religious forum led by writer and Christian thinker C.S. Lewis.
Over the years, Flew proclaimed the lack of evidence for God while teaching at Oxford, Aberdeen, Keele, and Reading universities in Britain, in visits to numerous U.S. and Canadian campuses and in books, articles, lectures and debates.
The philosopher Anthony Flew took almost his Life to know the truth about GOD, how long will an ordinary Atheist will take time to understand the truth ? A Life or Two?
What proof is there to deny the existence of GOD?
There is no evidence either way.
It is a pointless discussion.
Love and blessings Don
What proof is there to deny the existence of GOD?
Anyone that believes in the supernatural like a God and claims that it is real must shoulder the burden of proving its existence with empirical evidence in the first place. Not the other way round.
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You can't disprove a negative.
I conjecture the existence of the Invisible Pink Unicorn.
Please give evidence that there is no such thing, before you go denying it.
It all comes back to the burden of proof and not proving negatives.
If anything which can not be proved were assumed to be true, lord only knows how the judicial system would work...
okay... 1 person becomes a spiritual deist.
is that all?
One case of an atheist turning into a theist doesn't change universal facts. How about tons of example of atheists who once believed in God all though their lives but later left theism when they understood the lack of evidence supporting the supposed existence of a higher power?
I believe I, who was a theist for 17 years, am not the only example in that department.
And you didn't cite any evidence supporting the supposed existence of God here either.
Logical Error: Burden of Proof is on the Existential Claim.
Logical Error: Absent evidence, non-existence is the default logical claim.
Logical Error: Appeal to Authority.
Logical Error: Confirmation Bias.
You can't prove something that's already proven. The burden of proof is on the theist, as they say.
Yeah, dude, I am still looking for said %26quot;proof%26quot;.
There are no gods and the Christian version of a three-in-one god is simply laughable.
Taoist/Atheist (realist)
Typical theist view, we can't explain it so it must be god.
And I wouldn't hinge my argument on what some philosophy professor says.
Your question is a negative assertion, that is to say, you cannot prove the non-existence of something.
My 81 year old mother thought people were living her attic.Do you get my point.You can not prove things do not exist.Some would say the absence of proof god does exist is proof that he does not.But stick to your guns.I wish I believed.A life after this one.What a wonderful thought.
1. If a perfectly good god exists, then evil does not.
2. There is evil in the world.
3. Therefore, a perfectly good god does not exist.
Theres no proof that god is real, and theres no proof to deny his existance.
Flew isn't a theist, either.
%26quot;Remember this every time some apologist brings up the name of Flew to argue against atheism: this is an example of the depths to which desperate Christians will sink — they will lie and take advantage of the confusion of an old man to get a trophy for their wall. %26quot;
There is no excuse for denying the Lord.
%26quot;The fool says in his heart, %26quot;There is no God.%26quot; They are corrupt, their deeds are vile; there is no one who does good.%26quot; Psalm 14:1
%26quot;Who is the liar? It is the man who denies that Jesus is the Christ. Such a man is the antichrist--he denies the Father and the Son.%26quot; -1 John 2:22
Leprechauns created the universe
That's why all the plants are green
You should just accept it and forget all this God/Jesus nonsense.
Arguments from authority are a FALLACY.
Just because some old codgers get scared in their final days does not prove there is a god.
http://www.nizkor.org/features/fallacies…
The onus is on Christians et al,to prove the existence of %26quot;God%26quot;.
In the same way,the prosecution in a court of law must prove guilt.
Simply quoting one man,who changed his mind,does not make every Atheist wrong.
Well done idiot. You've claimed that because one atheist changed his religion when he reached 81 (and, it must be noted, a few years after he was diagnosed with DEMENTIA), that somehow means that God must be real.
Your stupidity is so vast it doesn't amuse me; it actually OFFENDS me as another human being.
There is no proof either way - faith is the only thing we have to base an opinion of this nature on. I find it interesting however that at such a feeble age this man wants to recant his life's work and go with %26quot;The Big Guy%26quot;.
ok...if every christian, jew, muslim, or any other religious group that believed in a god, stopped and prayed all together that god would stop and cure all those sickened by lets just say cancer, would that happen? what did jesus say about prayer?......or if everyone who said they would sell their soul to the devil if they would hit the lottery or hit the big money in a casino, wouldn't there be a lot more people with money?......that is just part of my proof and there is a lot more.....
Appeal to authority fallacy. What Flew or anyone else believes is irrelevant -- what matters is evidence. And there is none to show your god (or anyone else's) is real.
That alone, the complete lack of evidence to show there IS a god, is ample basis for ignoring those who make claims about gods existing. It's quite easy, however, to go further with specific gods.
For example, your christian god claims, in Matt. 17:20, that with just a tiny bit of faith you can command a mountain to move, and it will move...and nothing will be impossible for you. So go ahead, go command a mountain to move -- does it? Nope. Nobody's ever been able to pull off that trick. Try something that's impossible to everybody else, like levitating yourself 10 feet off the ground with no mechanical aid...can you do it? Nope. Things that are impossible to everybody else are also impossible to you. All such tests -- every single one -- from the bible fail, every single time. That only leaves two conclusions:
1. the christian god/jesus lies, and doesn't keep promises -- so is no god.
2. the christian god/jesus can't keep promises because they don't exist
Which is it?
Until Flew (or anybody else) has *evidence* that a %26quot;super-intelligence%26quot; exists, there's no reason to believe one does -- he's stating an argument from ignorance. Same goes for your god.
Peace.
There is exactly the same amount of proof denying gods existence, as there is proving his existence!! I think most atheists do not deny the existence or possibility of some %26quot;force%26quot; or creator of existence in the universe. They just deny the existence of the christian, muslim, hindi, buddhist ideas of god, because they are all manmade interpretations of what god is and what god wants. So, its not really the denial that a god may exist, but rather, that he has not revealed himself to us and doesnt care to be worshipped!
The flowers are beautiful and smells good for the bees to find them easily. And there are too many spots on the leopar to make us to differ him from the lion.
Please answer anybody!! I really need an answer fast! What do you think of this?
So I'm writing an FullMetal alchemist fanfiction and this is an exert of the first chapter. I posted one before but I decided to scrap it and start again. So here goes.
It's called: Don't cry, the world will never understand.
So today started off like any other. I struggled to find the strength, let alone a reason to get out of bed. Life didn鈥檛 have a purpose to me anymore, after all, what am I? Hayden Applegate. The most diminutive minority in the world, who wouldn鈥檛 be missed by anyone if she was gone.
I looked deep into the mirror sitting before me, studying the face that I knew all too well but seemed to foreign to me. I watched as her hand 鈥?tainted by the strange mark, reached to her face and brushed the long, dark hair from her lifeless eyes; the deep brown orbs holding such a past that I knew no one could ever understand. I held my hand against the mirror, meeting that of my reflections, and tried to imagine that the girl staring back at me was a person trapped behind an invisible wall of all the hate, pity and guilt that I never wanted, but got anyway. The same wall that held me in my own personal hell.
I raised my right hand to my face and examined the unique birthmark I possessed. It was all that covered the repugnant self- inflicted scars that were an everyday reminder that no matter what I did, I would never part from this mark. As I ran my fingers across it I closed my eyes and listened.
鈥業鈥檓 never going to be able to pay these bills-鈥?br>
鈥榃ho鈥檚 going to pick the kids up from school? Judy? No she鈥檚 working late too-鈥?br>
鈥楽he鈥檚 on to me I know it. Act normal John, act normal. I鈥檒l break up with her when the times right-鈥?br>
鈥?***, I killed him! He鈥檚 dead! I can鈥檛 go back to jail. I鈥檒l have to stash the body-鈥?br>
I snapped my eyes open, but didn鈥檛 gasp or flinch; I have heard plenty of thoughts like this. Seems these days I can see when other people鈥檚 lives are too short, but not my own. All my life I鈥檝e been outcast and alienated, condemned to live a life where I have nothing and no one. I can鈥檛 even close my eyes anymore in fear of reliving that hellish night in vivid memory; watching it like a horrifying movie playing infinitely behind my eyelids, that I can never escape, slowly inching me towards the abyss of insanity.
I looked warily at my alarm clock, 12:09 flash brightly in red neon numbers. Another day had started. Another day to put on a mask of feigned happiness and front people like nothing is wrong, that I鈥檓 fine and everything is fine and dandy, when it鈥檚 not. But there are some things you can鈥檛 hide from people no matter how hard you try; looking at me now, compared to three months ago, I had changed dramatically. I鈥檇 grown scarcely thin; my skin had paled into a lucid, translucent colour, my eyes had dropped from the weight of the black bags under them and Trichotillomania had me obsessively pulling my hair out. Insomnia had robbed me of my sleep and the couple of precious minutes of sleep I got were ridden with nightmares of the worst kind...memories. It doesn鈥檛 help that I鈥檓 never in complete peace and quiet 鈥?my mind is always muddled with the minds of others. Sometimes just simple things like thoughts other times riddled with stray images or dreams which caused me to appear detached as I watched.
I stood up. As I walked towards the bedroom door I thought about how this had become such a drawling, time consuming, obsessive ritual. Since the that night, I鈥檝e gone to bed at ten-thirty, fallen asleep at ten-thirty-five, then woken up at eleven-fifty-nine, sharp... the exact time that it happened. I waited for the door to be fully open before I flicked off my light; I always leave the lights on now because believe me, you never know who鈥檚 creeping around in the dark. The only light that could be seen in the house what that of the flickering television; I walked down the stairs on my toes, carful to miss the squeaky floorboards. Sure enough Helen 鈥?my foster Mother 鈥?had fallen into a deep sleep; her hushed snores made me shiver. I don't like her. I don't like the way her short, solid body seemed so intimidating against my tall, slender physique. I don't like the way her voice was loud and commanding, the result of years in the police force. But most of all I hated the way she always makes me feel so guilty for what happened.
So what do you think?
Please answer anybody!! I really need an answer fast! What do you think of this?
If you wrote that yourself, you did a pretty good job. It's very good. I'm guessing you've done this before. It's quite interesting. I really don't know how to write a book or story or w/e %26amp; wouldn't know where to begin. I don't know much about it but clearly you've got what it takes IMO. I just stumbled upon this question %26amp; thought I'd read it. You should definitely keep at it, you're good at it %26amp; should stick with it. I can actually relate to it myself. Not the killing part (lol), but some of the other parts, especially the first few lines. Anyway it was pretty good the whole way through. Not a thing wrong with it. I like the title too. It's interesting %26amp; draws you in.
have a star %26amp; have a nice day :-]
EDIT: Oh btw I forgot to mention there are some minor grammatical errors. Nevertheless it is pretty well written. Overall I would give it a 9.5 out of 10. It is pretty impressive.
It's called: Don't cry, the world will never understand.
So today started off like any other. I struggled to find the strength, let alone a reason to get out of bed. Life didn鈥檛 have a purpose to me anymore, after all, what am I? Hayden Applegate. The most diminutive minority in the world, who wouldn鈥檛 be missed by anyone if she was gone.
I looked deep into the mirror sitting before me, studying the face that I knew all too well but seemed to foreign to me. I watched as her hand 鈥?tainted by the strange mark, reached to her face and brushed the long, dark hair from her lifeless eyes; the deep brown orbs holding such a past that I knew no one could ever understand. I held my hand against the mirror, meeting that of my reflections, and tried to imagine that the girl staring back at me was a person trapped behind an invisible wall of all the hate, pity and guilt that I never wanted, but got anyway. The same wall that held me in my own personal hell.
I raised my right hand to my face and examined the unique birthmark I possessed. It was all that covered the repugnant self- inflicted scars that were an everyday reminder that no matter what I did, I would never part from this mark. As I ran my fingers across it I closed my eyes and listened.
鈥業鈥檓 never going to be able to pay these bills-鈥?br>
鈥榃ho鈥檚 going to pick the kids up from school? Judy? No she鈥檚 working late too-鈥?br>
鈥楽he鈥檚 on to me I know it. Act normal John, act normal. I鈥檒l break up with her when the times right-鈥?br>
鈥?***, I killed him! He鈥檚 dead! I can鈥檛 go back to jail. I鈥檒l have to stash the body-鈥?br>
I snapped my eyes open, but didn鈥檛 gasp or flinch; I have heard plenty of thoughts like this. Seems these days I can see when other people鈥檚 lives are too short, but not my own. All my life I鈥檝e been outcast and alienated, condemned to live a life where I have nothing and no one. I can鈥檛 even close my eyes anymore in fear of reliving that hellish night in vivid memory; watching it like a horrifying movie playing infinitely behind my eyelids, that I can never escape, slowly inching me towards the abyss of insanity.
I looked warily at my alarm clock, 12:09 flash brightly in red neon numbers. Another day had started. Another day to put on a mask of feigned happiness and front people like nothing is wrong, that I鈥檓 fine and everything is fine and dandy, when it鈥檚 not. But there are some things you can鈥檛 hide from people no matter how hard you try; looking at me now, compared to three months ago, I had changed dramatically. I鈥檇 grown scarcely thin; my skin had paled into a lucid, translucent colour, my eyes had dropped from the weight of the black bags under them and Trichotillomania had me obsessively pulling my hair out. Insomnia had robbed me of my sleep and the couple of precious minutes of sleep I got were ridden with nightmares of the worst kind...memories. It doesn鈥檛 help that I鈥檓 never in complete peace and quiet 鈥?my mind is always muddled with the minds of others. Sometimes just simple things like thoughts other times riddled with stray images or dreams which caused me to appear detached as I watched.
I stood up. As I walked towards the bedroom door I thought about how this had become such a drawling, time consuming, obsessive ritual. Since the that night, I鈥檝e gone to bed at ten-thirty, fallen asleep at ten-thirty-five, then woken up at eleven-fifty-nine, sharp... the exact time that it happened. I waited for the door to be fully open before I flicked off my light; I always leave the lights on now because believe me, you never know who鈥檚 creeping around in the dark. The only light that could be seen in the house what that of the flickering television; I walked down the stairs on my toes, carful to miss the squeaky floorboards. Sure enough Helen 鈥?my foster Mother 鈥?had fallen into a deep sleep; her hushed snores made me shiver. I don't like her. I don't like the way her short, solid body seemed so intimidating against my tall, slender physique. I don't like the way her voice was loud and commanding, the result of years in the police force. But most of all I hated the way she always makes me feel so guilty for what happened.
So what do you think?
Please answer anybody!! I really need an answer fast! What do you think of this?
If you wrote that yourself, you did a pretty good job. It's very good. I'm guessing you've done this before. It's quite interesting. I really don't know how to write a book or story or w/e %26amp; wouldn't know where to begin. I don't know much about it but clearly you've got what it takes IMO. I just stumbled upon this question %26amp; thought I'd read it. You should definitely keep at it, you're good at it %26amp; should stick with it. I can actually relate to it myself. Not the killing part (lol), but some of the other parts, especially the first few lines. Anyway it was pretty good the whole way through. Not a thing wrong with it. I like the title too. It's interesting %26amp; draws you in.
have a star %26amp; have a nice day :-]
EDIT: Oh btw I forgot to mention there are some minor grammatical errors. Nevertheless it is pretty well written. Overall I would give it a 9.5 out of 10. It is pretty impressive.
Ramadan: What is your belief - please answer this?
I wrote a %26quot; I believe essay %26quot; and isahllah will post it on the %26quot; I believe essay contest%26quot;
I believe that throughout humanity as a whole, although we are all different we can make an impact on others. Many people today are unaware of the incredible power of the mind. It is comforting to know that we can inherent the ability to create whatever we set in our mind. However, they don’t realize great ideas lie in unexpected places.
I was reading TIME magazine the other day when I came across an article, “20th century heroes and icons.” Almost ? of the people on the list before were ordinary folks who wanted better days for humanity. Mother Teresa was part of the list, she fought for the dignity of the destitute in a foreign land, she gave the world a moral example that bridged divides of culture, class and religion. After the article I immediately conducted a research, finding ordinary people who shaped our world with path breaking ideas and action. They were people who set the bar higher for every individual, and showed mankind that there is good left in the world. People like Viola Vaughn, David Puckett, Phymean Noun, and Carolyn Leroy who all had one mission, to change the world.
“I have never been especially impressed by the heroics of people who are convinced they are about to change the world. I am more awed by those who struggle to make one small difference after another.”- Ellen Goodman.
Everybody in this world has a purpose in life, they were created for something, sometimes it comes out naturally, other times you have to look for it, I’m still not sure what’s my purpose in life, but I think I was brought to this world to help people, I can, I enjoy helping people, and you don’t really have to do a lot to accomplish that, you just gotta be there for the people you love, and you’ll see how much a difference you make in their world.
Instead of talking the talk, I decided it was my turn to make a difference. I was inspired by Wangari Maathai. Wangari Maathai is 69 years old, but as achieved in her lifetime what others could not in a century or more. Growing up, her village did not have a primary school, so she moved towns to attend school. As a student she strived to be on the top of her class. Soon, she was selected to go to America to studies; which lead her to become the first African women to receive a PhD. With her degree Maathai could easily have chosen to get a job and live happily on her own, but she saw herself doing bigger and better for the world. So, she founded the Green Belt Movement in Kenya to fight deforestation. She employed local women to plant trees across Kenya. In the late1980's, the Kenyan government came down against Maathai and the Green Belt Movement, a plan to construct the 60-story Kenya Times Media Trust Complex in Uhuru Park. Maathai stood up against the plan by protesting a writing letters to anyone important in the government as well as to newspapers. Soon, foreign investors due to Maathai’s leadership shot down the plan.
To me, the biggest question regarding Maathai’s achievements was; why go through all the trouble in fighting the power and what did she have to gain from all of it? If I was ever in her shoes, I doubt that I would have completed a 1/3 of her accomplishments. The task at hand for her just seems too big for one person to take on, but again great ideas come from unexpected places. In the near future I hope to collect the courage and leadership Maathai showed through her struggles to make a difference in other people’s lives as well. Just the other day after learning about Maathai, I was arguing with my brother about if there was an good left in the world and I took the stand that there was. To prove my point that night, my sister and I started a program for called “Pennies4compassion” in which we would keep track of the amount of “good” we witness strangers do in a given day and in return would donate a penny for every deed.
Afterwards I hope to donate the money I collect to a meaningful cause and to have many more people participate. Just as Maathai left her imprints in the world through her kindness and selflessness, I hope to do the same. I will remember that. My mission would be nothing compared to that of Maathai’s, but it will be satisfying knowing that I made a difference in the world.
“To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.”
What do you guys think
what is your belief - don't worry you don't have to write a paper just one sentence or so!
Ramadan: What is your belief - please answer this?
Very inspiring sis! At first I was going to skim through it but I actually read it all!
Pennies4compassion is a great idea! May Allah (swt) reward you.what is the difference client side script
I believe that throughout humanity as a whole, although we are all different we can make an impact on others. Many people today are unaware of the incredible power of the mind. It is comforting to know that we can inherent the ability to create whatever we set in our mind. However, they don’t realize great ideas lie in unexpected places.
I was reading TIME magazine the other day when I came across an article, “20th century heroes and icons.” Almost ? of the people on the list before were ordinary folks who wanted better days for humanity. Mother Teresa was part of the list, she fought for the dignity of the destitute in a foreign land, she gave the world a moral example that bridged divides of culture, class and religion. After the article I immediately conducted a research, finding ordinary people who shaped our world with path breaking ideas and action. They were people who set the bar higher for every individual, and showed mankind that there is good left in the world. People like Viola Vaughn, David Puckett, Phymean Noun, and Carolyn Leroy who all had one mission, to change the world.
“I have never been especially impressed by the heroics of people who are convinced they are about to change the world. I am more awed by those who struggle to make one small difference after another.”- Ellen Goodman.
Everybody in this world has a purpose in life, they were created for something, sometimes it comes out naturally, other times you have to look for it, I’m still not sure what’s my purpose in life, but I think I was brought to this world to help people, I can, I enjoy helping people, and you don’t really have to do a lot to accomplish that, you just gotta be there for the people you love, and you’ll see how much a difference you make in their world.
Instead of talking the talk, I decided it was my turn to make a difference. I was inspired by Wangari Maathai. Wangari Maathai is 69 years old, but as achieved in her lifetime what others could not in a century or more. Growing up, her village did not have a primary school, so she moved towns to attend school. As a student she strived to be on the top of her class. Soon, she was selected to go to America to studies; which lead her to become the first African women to receive a PhD. With her degree Maathai could easily have chosen to get a job and live happily on her own, but she saw herself doing bigger and better for the world. So, she founded the Green Belt Movement in Kenya to fight deforestation. She employed local women to plant trees across Kenya. In the late1980's, the Kenyan government came down against Maathai and the Green Belt Movement, a plan to construct the 60-story Kenya Times Media Trust Complex in Uhuru Park. Maathai stood up against the plan by protesting a writing letters to anyone important in the government as well as to newspapers. Soon, foreign investors due to Maathai’s leadership shot down the plan.
To me, the biggest question regarding Maathai’s achievements was; why go through all the trouble in fighting the power and what did she have to gain from all of it? If I was ever in her shoes, I doubt that I would have completed a 1/3 of her accomplishments. The task at hand for her just seems too big for one person to take on, but again great ideas come from unexpected places. In the near future I hope to collect the courage and leadership Maathai showed through her struggles to make a difference in other people’s lives as well. Just the other day after learning about Maathai, I was arguing with my brother about if there was an good left in the world and I took the stand that there was. To prove my point that night, my sister and I started a program for called “Pennies4compassion” in which we would keep track of the amount of “good” we witness strangers do in a given day and in return would donate a penny for every deed.
Afterwards I hope to donate the money I collect to a meaningful cause and to have many more people participate. Just as Maathai left her imprints in the world through her kindness and selflessness, I hope to do the same. I will remember that. My mission would be nothing compared to that of Maathai’s, but it will be satisfying knowing that I made a difference in the world.
“To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.”
What do you guys think
what is your belief - don't worry you don't have to write a paper just one sentence or so!
Ramadan: What is your belief - please answer this?
Very inspiring sis! At first I was going to skim through it but I actually read it all!
Pennies4compassion is a great idea! May Allah (swt) reward you.
What is your Belief - I Believe ...?
I believe that throughout humanity as a whole, although we are all different we can make an impact on others. Many people today are unaware of the incredible power of the mind. It is comforting to know that we can inherent the ability to create whatever we set in our mind. However, they don’t realize great ideas lie in unexpected places.
I was reading TIME magazine the other day when I came across an article, “20th century heroes and icons.” Almost ? of the people on the list before were ordinary folks who wanted better days for humanity. Mother Teresa was part of the list, she fought for the dignity of the destitute in a foreign land, she gave the world a moral example that bridged divides of culture, class and religion. After the article I immediately conducted a research, finding ordinary people who shaped our world with path breaking ideas and action. They were people who set the bar higher for every individual, and showed mankind that there is good left in the world. People like Viola Vaughn, David Puckett, Phymean Noun, and Carolyn Leroy who all had one mission, to change the world.
“I have never been especially impressed by the heroics of people who are convinced they are about to change the world. I am more awed by those who struggle to make one small difference after another.”- Ellen Goodman.
Everybody in this world has a purpose in life, they were created for something, sometimes it comes out naturally, other times you have to look for it, I’m still not sure what’s my purpose in life, but I think I was brought to this world to help people, I can, I enjoy helping people, and you don’t really have to do a lot to accomplish that, you just gotta be there for the people you love, and you’ll see how much a difference you make in their world.
Instead of talking the talk, I decided it was my turn to make a difference. I was inspired by Wangari Maathai. Wangari Maathai is 69 years old, but as achieved in her lifetime what others could not in a century or more. Growing up, her village did not have a primary school, so she moved towns to attend school. As a student she strived to be on the top of her class. Soon, she was selected to go to America to studies; which lead her to become the first African women to receive a PhD. With her degree Maathai could easily have chosen to get a job and live happily on her own, but she saw herself doing bigger and better for the world. So, she founded the Green Belt Movement in Kenya to fight deforestation. She employed local women to plant trees across Kenya. In the late1980's, the Kenyan government came down against Maathai and the Green Belt Movement, a plan to construct the 60-story Kenya Times Media Trust Complex in Uhuru Park. Maathai stood up against the plan by protesting a writing letters to anyone important in the government as well as to newspapers. Soon, foreign investors due to Maathai’s leadership shot down the plan.
To me, the biggest question regarding Maathai’s achievements was; why go through all the trouble in fighting the power and what did she have to gain from all of it? If I was ever in her shoes, I doubt that I would have completed a 1/3 of her accomplishments. The task at hand for her just seems too big for one person to take on, but again great ideas come from unexpected places. In the near future I hope to collect the courage and leadership Maathai showed through her struggles to make a difference in other people’s lives as well. Just the other day after learning about Maathai, I was arguing with my brother about if there was an good left in the world and I took the stand that there was. To prove my point that night, my sister and I started a program for called “Pennies4compassion” in which we would keep track of the amount of “good” we witness strangers do in a given day and in return would donate a penny for every deed.
Afterwards I hope to donate the money I collect to a meaningful cause and to have many more people participate. Just as Maathai left her imprints in the world through her kindness and selflessness, I hope to do the same. I will remember that. My mission would be nothing compared to that of Maathai’s, but it will be satisfying knowing that I made a difference in the world.
“To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.”
what is your belief
What is your Belief - I Believe ...?
I think you have an excellent idea.
I would also suggest you read The Life You Can Save by Peter Singer
Banker to the Poor and A World Without Poverty by Muhammad Yunus
The Blue Sweater: Bridging the Gap Between Rich and Poor in an Interconnected World by Jacqueline Novogratz
Three Cups of Tea: One Man's Mission to Promote Peace . . . One School at a Time by Greg Mortenson
Pay it Forward by Catharine Ryan Hyde
Personally, I believe I am here only to help other sentient beings and that we are all interconnected to and interdependent on each other.
%26quot;We ourselves feel that what we are doing is just a drop in the ocean. But the ocean would be less because of that missing drop. %26quot;
Mother Teresa
What is your Belief - I Believe ...?
That's a neat idea! Maybe I should start a 'pennies4compassion' account too!
%26lt;--------------------------------my belief.
My belief is to question everything
Christian Methodist...
yes i want to design cheap affordable sustaniable homes for reffuges and depraved people.
You are here to serve. So serve well and in kindness.
I believe that facts are paramount
I believe i dont wanna read all that.
Christ, that's all I need.
Keep on living for God.
3:1 My son, forget not my law; but let thine heart keep my commandments:
3:2 For length of days, and long life, and peace, shall they add to thee.
3:3 Let not mercy and truth forsake thee: bind them about thy neck; write them upon the table of thine heart:
3:4 So shalt thou find favour and good understanding in the sight of God and man.
3:5 Trust in the LORD with all thine heart; and lean not unto thine own understanding.
3:6 In all thy ways acknowledge him, and he shall direct thy paths.
3:7 Be not wise in thine own eyes: fear the LORD, and depart from evil.
3:8 It shall be health to thy navel, and marrow to thy bones.
I was reading TIME magazine the other day when I came across an article, “20th century heroes and icons.” Almost ? of the people on the list before were ordinary folks who wanted better days for humanity. Mother Teresa was part of the list, she fought for the dignity of the destitute in a foreign land, she gave the world a moral example that bridged divides of culture, class and religion. After the article I immediately conducted a research, finding ordinary people who shaped our world with path breaking ideas and action. They were people who set the bar higher for every individual, and showed mankind that there is good left in the world. People like Viola Vaughn, David Puckett, Phymean Noun, and Carolyn Leroy who all had one mission, to change the world.
“I have never been especially impressed by the heroics of people who are convinced they are about to change the world. I am more awed by those who struggle to make one small difference after another.”- Ellen Goodman.
Everybody in this world has a purpose in life, they were created for something, sometimes it comes out naturally, other times you have to look for it, I’m still not sure what’s my purpose in life, but I think I was brought to this world to help people, I can, I enjoy helping people, and you don’t really have to do a lot to accomplish that, you just gotta be there for the people you love, and you’ll see how much a difference you make in their world.
Instead of talking the talk, I decided it was my turn to make a difference. I was inspired by Wangari Maathai. Wangari Maathai is 69 years old, but as achieved in her lifetime what others could not in a century or more. Growing up, her village did not have a primary school, so she moved towns to attend school. As a student she strived to be on the top of her class. Soon, she was selected to go to America to studies; which lead her to become the first African women to receive a PhD. With her degree Maathai could easily have chosen to get a job and live happily on her own, but she saw herself doing bigger and better for the world. So, she founded the Green Belt Movement in Kenya to fight deforestation. She employed local women to plant trees across Kenya. In the late1980's, the Kenyan government came down against Maathai and the Green Belt Movement, a plan to construct the 60-story Kenya Times Media Trust Complex in Uhuru Park. Maathai stood up against the plan by protesting a writing letters to anyone important in the government as well as to newspapers. Soon, foreign investors due to Maathai’s leadership shot down the plan.
To me, the biggest question regarding Maathai’s achievements was; why go through all the trouble in fighting the power and what did she have to gain from all of it? If I was ever in her shoes, I doubt that I would have completed a 1/3 of her accomplishments. The task at hand for her just seems too big for one person to take on, but again great ideas come from unexpected places. In the near future I hope to collect the courage and leadership Maathai showed through her struggles to make a difference in other people’s lives as well. Just the other day after learning about Maathai, I was arguing with my brother about if there was an good left in the world and I took the stand that there was. To prove my point that night, my sister and I started a program for called “Pennies4compassion” in which we would keep track of the amount of “good” we witness strangers do in a given day and in return would donate a penny for every deed.
Afterwards I hope to donate the money I collect to a meaningful cause and to have many more people participate. Just as Maathai left her imprints in the world through her kindness and selflessness, I hope to do the same. I will remember that. My mission would be nothing compared to that of Maathai’s, but it will be satisfying knowing that I made a difference in the world.
“To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.”
what is your belief
What is your Belief - I Believe ...?
I think you have an excellent idea.
I would also suggest you read The Life You Can Save by Peter Singer
Banker to the Poor and A World Without Poverty by Muhammad Yunus
The Blue Sweater: Bridging the Gap Between Rich and Poor in an Interconnected World by Jacqueline Novogratz
Three Cups of Tea: One Man's Mission to Promote Peace . . . One School at a Time by Greg Mortenson
Pay it Forward by Catharine Ryan Hyde
Personally, I believe I am here only to help other sentient beings and that we are all interconnected to and interdependent on each other.
%26quot;We ourselves feel that what we are doing is just a drop in the ocean. But the ocean would be less because of that missing drop. %26quot;
Mother Teresa
What is your Belief - I Believe ...?
That's a neat idea! Maybe I should start a 'pennies4compassion' account too!
%26lt;--------------------------------my belief.
My belief is to question everything
Christian Methodist...
yes i want to design cheap affordable sustaniable homes for reffuges and depraved people.
You are here to serve. So serve well and in kindness.
I believe that facts are paramount
I believe i dont wanna read all that.
Christ, that's all I need.
Keep on living for God.
3:1 My son, forget not my law; but let thine heart keep my commandments:
3:2 For length of days, and long life, and peace, shall they add to thee.
3:3 Let not mercy and truth forsake thee: bind them about thy neck; write them upon the table of thine heart:
3:4 So shalt thou find favour and good understanding in the sight of God and man.
3:5 Trust in the LORD with all thine heart; and lean not unto thine own understanding.
3:6 In all thy ways acknowledge him, and he shall direct thy paths.
3:7 Be not wise in thine own eyes: fear the LORD, and depart from evil.
3:8 It shall be health to thy navel, and marrow to thy bones.
John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour with Pastor Rick Warren @ their faith and how it will do?
http://CBNNews.com - LAKE FOREST, Calif. - Christian voters across the country are anxiously waiting to see what will happen at Saturday%26#039;s Civil Forum at Saddleback Church.
Sens. John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour chatting with Pastor Rick Warren about their faith and how it will shape their decisions as President of the United States.
The men will be asked about their position on abortion, gay marriage, stem cell research, the AIDS crisis, the environment and a number of other key issues important to voters.
THE BRODY FILE:
Rick Warren Plans
to Bring up Obama,
McCain鈥檚 Personal Life
Rick Warren will ask
Obama and McCain
about Abortion, Marriage
Rick Warren Compares
McCain%26#039;s Faith to Gerald Ford
Rick Warren Says
Jesus Question will
be posed to McCain, Obama
Rick Warren Interview
Coming Soon
Obama, McCain
Battle for Faith Vote
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to No. 1 Book
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%26quot;The person who says %26#039;Well, I%26#039;m going to put my faith on the shelf and not let it affect my decisions as President%26#039; is either lying or they%26#039;re ignorant,%26quot; said Warren. %26quot;Because you can%26#039;t do it.%26quot;
This is Not a Debate
The forum is not a debate. It will begin at 8:00 p.m. EST and will give both men the opportunity to answer the same identical questions.
Obama will go first followed by McCain. Both candidates will have an hour apiece to make their points and give their answers.
The forum will be divided into four parts: stewardship of the President, leadership, world view and the role of America in the world.
It%26#039;s the section on the candidate%26#039;s world view that Warren says has people worried, but he says he plans to be totally impartial and fair.
%26quot;I%26#039;m going to ask them about abortion. I am going to ask them about the definition of marriage,%26quot; he said. %26quot;I intend to ask the tough questions, but I am going to ask them in a civil way.
And he plans to ask both of them about Jesus Christ.
%26quot;I%26#039;m certainly going to ask a question about Jesus Christ in this forum,%26quot; he told CBN News. %26quot;No doubt about it.%26quot;
The two men will get a chance to appear briefly on stage together. It will be the first time they%26#039;ve done so in their current positions.
%26quot;They%26#039;re going to come out, take a picture together. That%26#039;s the picture everybody wants,%26quot; joked Warren.
Criticism from the Right
The mega pastor has faced some tough criticism from religious leaders on the right who are not happy that he partnered with Obama to take on the global fight against AIDS.
Some of his critics want him to take a more vocal stance on issues near and dear to Christian Conservatives: abortion and gay marriage.
But Warren recently decided to expand his agenda. It now includes the AIDS crisis, Darfur and climate change.
He notes that 40 million babies who could have grown up to vote in this country have been aborted.
But he says, %26quot;Every one of those 40 million children are in Heaven. Now the people who had those abortions are not guaranteed Heaven. Now where would you have an evangelist spend most of his time? Winning the people to Christ who need forgiveness - or worrying about all those children who are in Heaven because they are safe鈥?%26quot;
Even so, the move has left some wondering if he has forgotten about the key life and marriage issues.
%26quot;We have to go back to what Evangelicals have been for 2,000 years,%26quot; Warren said.
He says Evangelicals have always been concerned about more than just the life and marriage issue.
He notes that all of the great movements in history were led by Evangelicals including: the abolition of slavery, the woman%26#039;s right to vote and the Civil Rights Movement.
And as a result, Warren has moved from what he calls pro-life to %26quot;whole life.%26quot;
%26quot;I want to raise the personal responsibility in people%26#039;s lives,%26quot; Warren said. %26quot;I want to raise that level of civility in our society and I want to raise the level of credibility in the Church - that the Church is not known simply for what we%26#039;re against.%26quot;
A Personal Mission
For Warren, this mission is deeply personal.
By every measure Warren is successful beyond belief. He pastors a congregation of roughly 23,000 people. He has led more than 20,000 people to Christ. He is the author of the wildly popular Purpose Driven Life and Purpose Driven Church.
He has conducted leadership seminars at Harvard, Oxford, Cambridge and will soon lead one in Kenya before the entire parliament. Warren is featured on the cover of the current edition of Time Magazine.
So what more could he want? Much more.
Warren says he was visiting a tiny church in Africa when God spoke to him.
%26quot;God said %26#039;Yeah, all this stuff you%26#039;re doing is good. You%26#039;re training pastors, you%26#039;re winning people to Christ, but you don%26#039;t care about the people I love the most. The poor and the sick.%26#039;%26quot;
And it was at that moment that Warren said %26quot;I will change.%26quot;
He is currently embarking on the P.E.A.C.E plan. The goal of the program is to gather one billion Christians together to battle spiritual emptiness, corrupt leadership, poverty, disease and illiteracy.
Warren says Christians need to be reminded that %26quot;the Bible tells us that Jesus Christ went into every village preaching, teaching and healing. One-third of Jesus%26#039; ministry was health care. He cared about the sick. He was a healer.%26quot;
And for Warren, it%26#039;s all about bringing people to Christ and making sure His light shines in dark places.
Warren recently attended the XVII International AIDS Conference in Mexico. He along with his wife and 11 members from Saddleback Church attended the six-day event.
Warren may have been the only pastor at the conference.
%26quot;Why did I go?%26quot; asks Warren. %26quot;Cause that%26#039;s where the Church needs to be - in the heart of darkness. We need to be holding up the light of Christ, holding up the cross - where everybody else is afraid to go.%26quot;
Needed: More Tolerance
Many religious voters across the country are not satisfied with the way religion has been handled during this election.
Some people are leery of Obama%26#039;s %26quot;faith talk,%26quot; while others wish McCain would say more about his faith walk.
But Warren believes that people in our society need to be more tolerant.
%26quot;The problem is we don%26#039;t have the right to demonize people just because we disagree with them. We don%26#039;t have a right to destroy their character or reputation just because we disagree,%26quot; he said.
And this belief has gotten him in hot water with some of his peers who criticize his approach.
%26quot;I%26#039;m not a religious left because I don%26#039;t believe in big government鈥%26#039;m not secular left. I%26#039;m not religious right, and I%26#039;m not secular right,%26quot; he said. %26quot;I happen to be in the kingdom of God. My kingdom is not of this world.%26quot;
Warren shrugs off the criticism.
%26quot;We are members of the body of Christ. Christ shed his blood for us. We%26#039;re going to live in Heaven together,%26quot; he said. %26quot;And yet if you don%26#039;t hold the party line, all of a sudden for these people politics trumps faith鈥?And sometimes when people don%26#039;t understand that, they want you to be on their political bandwagon.%26quot;
God Is In Control
So as millions get ready to tune in and watch Saturday%26#039;s forum, Warren takes it all in stride as he reminds us God is in control.
%26quot;You cannot change lives simply through laws - that%26#039;s what the book of Galatians teaches鈥o I don%26#039;t have that much faith in politics,%26quot; he said. %26quot;Politicians come and go. No matter who gets elected - in four or eight years, they%26#039;ll be out.%26quot;
He notes, %26quot;Neither of these men are the next savior of the world. They%26#039;re both flawed individuals, and they%26#039;re both going to need God.%26quot;
Tune in to The 700 Club, Monday, August 18. CBN News Senior National Correspondent David Brody will have highlights from this weekend%26#039;s forum. Check local listings.
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John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour with Pastor Rick Warren @ their faith and how it will do?
I%26#039;ll watch with interest...
I can%26#039;t wait to hear how they answer lol
Thanks for the link -- I live in the UK but i%26#039;m interested b/c i%26#039;m Christian and b/c who ever is elected affects us here too.
I%26#039;m surprised you haven%26#039;t got more answers to this one.
EDIT:
There appears to be a glitch submitting an answer to this question - i tried 6 times before it worked - maybe this is why you have so few answers ; )
John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour with Pastor Rick Warren @ their faith and how it will do?
Thanks Ian for your vote.
I must remember we are 5hrs ahead in the UK - well i think it%26#039;s around that - will try to remember to watch it...thanks again for the link, lot of good stuff there );
Thanks Nina for confirming the glitch...
What difference does it make?
YES!!
And I have been trying to submit my answer to this many times, I hope it gets through soon
I like Rick Warren. I think he will ask the questions that I want to hear
Sens. John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour chatting with Pastor Rick Warren about their faith and how it will shape their decisions as President of the United States.
The men will be asked about their position on abortion, gay marriage, stem cell research, the AIDS crisis, the environment and a number of other key issues important to voters.
THE BRODY FILE:
Rick Warren Plans
to Bring up Obama,
McCain鈥檚 Personal Life
Rick Warren will ask
Obama and McCain
about Abortion, Marriage
Rick Warren Compares
McCain%26#039;s Faith to Gerald Ford
Rick Warren Says
Jesus Question will
be posed to McCain, Obama
Rick Warren Interview
Coming Soon
Obama, McCain
Battle for Faith Vote
RELATED STORIES:
Obama Issues Rebuttal
to No. 1 Book
McCain: Abortion Rights
Veep Possible
Clinton to Get Roll Call at Convention
%26quot;The person who says %26#039;Well, I%26#039;m going to put my faith on the shelf and not let it affect my decisions as President%26#039; is either lying or they%26#039;re ignorant,%26quot; said Warren. %26quot;Because you can%26#039;t do it.%26quot;
This is Not a Debate
The forum is not a debate. It will begin at 8:00 p.m. EST and will give both men the opportunity to answer the same identical questions.
Obama will go first followed by McCain. Both candidates will have an hour apiece to make their points and give their answers.
The forum will be divided into four parts: stewardship of the President, leadership, world view and the role of America in the world.
It%26#039;s the section on the candidate%26#039;s world view that Warren says has people worried, but he says he plans to be totally impartial and fair.
%26quot;I%26#039;m going to ask them about abortion. I am going to ask them about the definition of marriage,%26quot; he said. %26quot;I intend to ask the tough questions, but I am going to ask them in a civil way.
And he plans to ask both of them about Jesus Christ.
%26quot;I%26#039;m certainly going to ask a question about Jesus Christ in this forum,%26quot; he told CBN News. %26quot;No doubt about it.%26quot;
The two men will get a chance to appear briefly on stage together. It will be the first time they%26#039;ve done so in their current positions.
%26quot;They%26#039;re going to come out, take a picture together. That%26#039;s the picture everybody wants,%26quot; joked Warren.
Criticism from the Right
The mega pastor has faced some tough criticism from religious leaders on the right who are not happy that he partnered with Obama to take on the global fight against AIDS.
Some of his critics want him to take a more vocal stance on issues near and dear to Christian Conservatives: abortion and gay marriage.
But Warren recently decided to expand his agenda. It now includes the AIDS crisis, Darfur and climate change.
He notes that 40 million babies who could have grown up to vote in this country have been aborted.
But he says, %26quot;Every one of those 40 million children are in Heaven. Now the people who had those abortions are not guaranteed Heaven. Now where would you have an evangelist spend most of his time? Winning the people to Christ who need forgiveness - or worrying about all those children who are in Heaven because they are safe鈥?%26quot;
Even so, the move has left some wondering if he has forgotten about the key life and marriage issues.
%26quot;We have to go back to what Evangelicals have been for 2,000 years,%26quot; Warren said.
He says Evangelicals have always been concerned about more than just the life and marriage issue.
He notes that all of the great movements in history were led by Evangelicals including: the abolition of slavery, the woman%26#039;s right to vote and the Civil Rights Movement.
And as a result, Warren has moved from what he calls pro-life to %26quot;whole life.%26quot;
%26quot;I want to raise the personal responsibility in people%26#039;s lives,%26quot; Warren said. %26quot;I want to raise that level of civility in our society and I want to raise the level of credibility in the Church - that the Church is not known simply for what we%26#039;re against.%26quot;
A Personal Mission
For Warren, this mission is deeply personal.
By every measure Warren is successful beyond belief. He pastors a congregation of roughly 23,000 people. He has led more than 20,000 people to Christ. He is the author of the wildly popular Purpose Driven Life and Purpose Driven Church.
He has conducted leadership seminars at Harvard, Oxford, Cambridge and will soon lead one in Kenya before the entire parliament. Warren is featured on the cover of the current edition of Time Magazine.
So what more could he want? Much more.
Warren says he was visiting a tiny church in Africa when God spoke to him.
%26quot;God said %26#039;Yeah, all this stuff you%26#039;re doing is good. You%26#039;re training pastors, you%26#039;re winning people to Christ, but you don%26#039;t care about the people I love the most. The poor and the sick.%26#039;%26quot;
And it was at that moment that Warren said %26quot;I will change.%26quot;
He is currently embarking on the P.E.A.C.E plan. The goal of the program is to gather one billion Christians together to battle spiritual emptiness, corrupt leadership, poverty, disease and illiteracy.
Warren says Christians need to be reminded that %26quot;the Bible tells us that Jesus Christ went into every village preaching, teaching and healing. One-third of Jesus%26#039; ministry was health care. He cared about the sick. He was a healer.%26quot;
And for Warren, it%26#039;s all about bringing people to Christ and making sure His light shines in dark places.
Warren recently attended the XVII International AIDS Conference in Mexico. He along with his wife and 11 members from Saddleback Church attended the six-day event.
Warren may have been the only pastor at the conference.
%26quot;Why did I go?%26quot; asks Warren. %26quot;Cause that%26#039;s where the Church needs to be - in the heart of darkness. We need to be holding up the light of Christ, holding up the cross - where everybody else is afraid to go.%26quot;
Needed: More Tolerance
Many religious voters across the country are not satisfied with the way religion has been handled during this election.
Some people are leery of Obama%26#039;s %26quot;faith talk,%26quot; while others wish McCain would say more about his faith walk.
But Warren believes that people in our society need to be more tolerant.
%26quot;The problem is we don%26#039;t have the right to demonize people just because we disagree with them. We don%26#039;t have a right to destroy their character or reputation just because we disagree,%26quot; he said.
And this belief has gotten him in hot water with some of his peers who criticize his approach.
%26quot;I%26#039;m not a religious left because I don%26#039;t believe in big government鈥%26#039;m not secular left. I%26#039;m not religious right, and I%26#039;m not secular right,%26quot; he said. %26quot;I happen to be in the kingdom of God. My kingdom is not of this world.%26quot;
Warren shrugs off the criticism.
%26quot;We are members of the body of Christ. Christ shed his blood for us. We%26#039;re going to live in Heaven together,%26quot; he said. %26quot;And yet if you don%26#039;t hold the party line, all of a sudden for these people politics trumps faith鈥?And sometimes when people don%26#039;t understand that, they want you to be on their political bandwagon.%26quot;
God Is In Control
So as millions get ready to tune in and watch Saturday%26#039;s forum, Warren takes it all in stride as he reminds us God is in control.
%26quot;You cannot change lives simply through laws - that%26#039;s what the book of Galatians teaches鈥o I don%26#039;t have that much faith in politics,%26quot; he said. %26quot;Politicians come and go. No matter who gets elected - in four or eight years, they%26#039;ll be out.%26quot;
He notes, %26quot;Neither of these men are the next savior of the world. They%26#039;re both flawed individuals, and they%26#039;re both going to need God.%26quot;
Tune in to The 700 Club, Monday, August 18. CBN News Senior National Correspondent David Brody will have highlights from this weekend%26#039;s forum. Check local listings.
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John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour with Pastor Rick Warren @ their faith and how it will do?
I%26#039;ll watch with interest...
I can%26#039;t wait to hear how they answer lol
Thanks for the link -- I live in the UK but i%26#039;m interested b/c i%26#039;m Christian and b/c who ever is elected affects us here too.
I%26#039;m surprised you haven%26#039;t got more answers to this one.
EDIT:
There appears to be a glitch submitting an answer to this question - i tried 6 times before it worked - maybe this is why you have so few answers ; )
John McCain and Barack Obama will each spend an hour with Pastor Rick Warren @ their faith and how it will do?
Thanks Ian for your vote.
I must remember we are 5hrs ahead in the UK - well i think it%26#039;s around that - will try to remember to watch it...thanks again for the link, lot of good stuff there );
Thanks Nina for confirming the glitch...
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YES!!
And I have been trying to submit my answer to this many times, I hope it gets through soon
I like Rick Warren. I think he will ask the questions that I want to hear
Can someone check this paper for me?
can someone just proof read this paper and tell me what i should change/add and what you think about it... no one is home right now to help me proof read it so...if you can help that would be great. thankss in advance. (also i might use this paper as one of my college essays, so tell my what you think and what corrections i should make)
Seeing Myself for the First Time-
The question that everybody wants to know is what do I see when I look in the mirror?
First of all, it’s not what I see, but it’s who I see, and what’s inside of me that I want people to
get to know. But to answer that question I would blatantly tell them that I see a young seventeen
year old girl with long black hair, black eyes, dark skin and a smile that can brighten up
someone’s day. Although these are physical features of what I see in the mirror and what people
notice when we meet each other for the first time, they can’t see my personality or the emotional
side of me.
I see a girl who might seem like she doesn’t care about her appearance or what others
think about her, but deep down inside this girl still feels insecure and not confident about being
herself around people. This girl isn’t confident enough to open her mouth to say something that’s
on her mind. She’s hesitant to speak her mind in the classroom because she’s not only afraid of
what others will say but will be embarrassed if she gets the wrong answer.
I see someone who is not being true to herself, someone who’s too concerned with
making others feel happy, and often forgets about taking the time to check in on her own
happiness. Sometimes she gets caught up in other people’s lives by trying to make theirs better,
she forgets about her own. I see someone who would wake up in the morning, put a smile on and
go on about her day even though she had a bad night. She is that girl who will say everything is
alright even though deep down something is bothering her. Why should she vent to someone and
make a bigger deal out of it? I see someone who doesn’t like letting people know details about
her life because she is apprehensive that they’ll judge her and think differently about her. I see
someone who would rather tell people about the good things in her life and keep the negativity to
herself.
I see someone who is a captain of the soccer team but can sometimes find it difficult to
lead them. This is the time where she has to step up and quit being her quiet self. Being a captain
doesn’t mean she can boss the team around or tell the team what to do. She has to find a way to
motivate them when they’re losing 6-0. She has to set an example when working hard even
though they’re exhausted. This was when I took a deeper look into the mirror and realized that
this is my senior year and I obviously didn’t want to quit and sit the bench the rest of the season.
I have to get past all the pessimistic comments and show my team I am capable of leading them
to victory. I can’t let them down and I can’t let myself down. When I looked in the mirror and
saw myself starring back I realized that I didn’t want to spend my whole high school career
sitting in the corner being quite. I wanted to branch out and being the captain of the soccer team
showed me that I do have confidence. It forced me to step out of my comfort zone and be myself.
I use to see someone who wishes that they were taller, prettier, more confident and
outgoing. Now I see someone who realizes that she wouldn’t want to change anything about
herself because everything happens for a reason. Who I am today is what everyone likes about
me and that is why I have so many caring people in my life. They like me for who I am and not
what I am trying to be. I know now that I have the confidence to speak up, do what I want, and
try different things without caring about what the world thinks, somewhere inside me. I know I
am capable of doing anything that my heart desires. I just have to look deep down and find it.
This is my last year at Warwick Veterans Memorial High School. Before graduation I
want to be able to look in the mirror and see the person I was, the person I am, and the person I
will become and say with confidence “I am (first middle last - name goes here. I am a confident, friendly girl who doesn’t care what other people think. I am beautiful on the inside and the outside. I am intelligent and I am definitely someone you would want to meet and become friends with.”
Can someone check this paper for me?
Very, very good. There are just a few grammar and spelling probs I'd like to help you with.
In the sentence that starts %26quot;She's hesitant to speak her mind...%26quot; you need a comma before %26quot;but%26quot;.
%26quot;Sometimes she gets caught up in other people's lives and, by trying to make theirs better, she forgets about her own.%26quot;
%26quot;When I looked in the mirror....quiet.%26quot;
%26quot;I wanted to branch out, and being the captain of the soccer team showed me that I do have confidence.%26quot;
%26quot;I used to see someone....they were taller, prettier, more confident, and outgoing.%26quot;
%26quot;I know now that I have the confidence to speak up, do what I want, and try different things: without caring about what the world thinks somewhere inside of me.%26quot;
I absolutely love the way you worded the last few sentences...very impressive. With such insight into yourself at such a young age, I predict you will enjoy many friends and many successes in life. Good luck to you and God bless you with the best in life.
Seeing Myself for the First Time-
The question that everybody wants to know is what do I see when I look in the mirror?
First of all, it’s not what I see, but it’s who I see, and what’s inside of me that I want people to
get to know. But to answer that question I would blatantly tell them that I see a young seventeen
year old girl with long black hair, black eyes, dark skin and a smile that can brighten up
someone’s day. Although these are physical features of what I see in the mirror and what people
notice when we meet each other for the first time, they can’t see my personality or the emotional
side of me.
I see a girl who might seem like she doesn’t care about her appearance or what others
think about her, but deep down inside this girl still feels insecure and not confident about being
herself around people. This girl isn’t confident enough to open her mouth to say something that’s
on her mind. She’s hesitant to speak her mind in the classroom because she’s not only afraid of
what others will say but will be embarrassed if she gets the wrong answer.
I see someone who is not being true to herself, someone who’s too concerned with
making others feel happy, and often forgets about taking the time to check in on her own
happiness. Sometimes she gets caught up in other people’s lives by trying to make theirs better,
she forgets about her own. I see someone who would wake up in the morning, put a smile on and
go on about her day even though she had a bad night. She is that girl who will say everything is
alright even though deep down something is bothering her. Why should she vent to someone and
make a bigger deal out of it? I see someone who doesn’t like letting people know details about
her life because she is apprehensive that they’ll judge her and think differently about her. I see
someone who would rather tell people about the good things in her life and keep the negativity to
herself.
I see someone who is a captain of the soccer team but can sometimes find it difficult to
lead them. This is the time where she has to step up and quit being her quiet self. Being a captain
doesn’t mean she can boss the team around or tell the team what to do. She has to find a way to
motivate them when they’re losing 6-0. She has to set an example when working hard even
though they’re exhausted. This was when I took a deeper look into the mirror and realized that
this is my senior year and I obviously didn’t want to quit and sit the bench the rest of the season.
I have to get past all the pessimistic comments and show my team I am capable of leading them
to victory. I can’t let them down and I can’t let myself down. When I looked in the mirror and
saw myself starring back I realized that I didn’t want to spend my whole high school career
sitting in the corner being quite. I wanted to branch out and being the captain of the soccer team
showed me that I do have confidence. It forced me to step out of my comfort zone and be myself.
I use to see someone who wishes that they were taller, prettier, more confident and
outgoing. Now I see someone who realizes that she wouldn’t want to change anything about
herself because everything happens for a reason. Who I am today is what everyone likes about
me and that is why I have so many caring people in my life. They like me for who I am and not
what I am trying to be. I know now that I have the confidence to speak up, do what I want, and
try different things without caring about what the world thinks, somewhere inside me. I know I
am capable of doing anything that my heart desires. I just have to look deep down and find it.
This is my last year at Warwick Veterans Memorial High School. Before graduation I
want to be able to look in the mirror and see the person I was, the person I am, and the person I
will become and say with confidence “I am (first middle last - name goes here. I am a confident, friendly girl who doesn’t care what other people think. I am beautiful on the inside and the outside. I am intelligent and I am definitely someone you would want to meet and become friends with.”
Can someone check this paper for me?
Very, very good. There are just a few grammar and spelling probs I'd like to help you with.
In the sentence that starts %26quot;She's hesitant to speak her mind...%26quot; you need a comma before %26quot;but%26quot;.
%26quot;Sometimes she gets caught up in other people's lives and, by trying to make theirs better, she forgets about her own.%26quot;
%26quot;When I looked in the mirror....quiet.%26quot;
%26quot;I wanted to branch out, and being the captain of the soccer team showed me that I do have confidence.%26quot;
%26quot;I used to see someone....they were taller, prettier, more confident, and outgoing.%26quot;
%26quot;I know now that I have the confidence to speak up, do what I want, and try different things: without caring about what the world thinks somewhere inside of me.%26quot;
I absolutely love the way you worded the last few sentences...very impressive. With such insight into yourself at such a young age, I predict you will enjoy many friends and many successes in life. Good luck to you and God bless you with the best in life.
Can you please correct my mistakes ex grammar, fragments run on sentences "MONKEYS PAW" best answer 10 pts?
I have to write a paragraph on how mr. whites attitute towards the paw changes please tell me some ways i can make my parragraph sound more strong
Mr. White changes his attitude toward the paw, from once a sence of curiosity to knowing that this paw is the source of his and his families’ corruption. Mr. White is unaware of the supernatural powers that the monkey's paw possesses. He does not believe that %26quot;fate rules people's lives an d those who interfere with it do so to their sorrow%26quot;(4). The paw changes the serene environment in the family to a home that is full of sorrow. When the paw takes the life of Mr. White's only son, his views about thepaw hange drastically. The man does not want to have any connection with this dreadful talisman. In order to reverse the wish he gets %26quot;on his hands and knees grapes wildly o the floor in search of the paw%26quot;(8). The monkey's paw leaves Mr. White in a world full of sadness. He cries to his wife,%26quot;for heavens sake do not let it in%26quot;(8). The attitude towards the paw takes an opposite turn from the time Mr. White first sees the paw. He learns the most important lesson from the paw that he should not interfere with faith again.
HELP WITH CONCLUDInG SENTENCE
Can you please correct my mistakes ex grammar, fragments run on sentences %26quot;MONKEYS PAW%26quot; best answer 10 pts?
I love this story. You need to talk more about how Mr. White feels about the paw at the start. Some sentence ideas would be:
When Mr. White first gets the monkey's paw, he....
Mr. White believes the paw is...
He hopes he will be able to...
Here is a corrected version of your paragraph:
Mr. White changes his attitude toward the paw, from a sense of curiosity to knowing that this paw is the source of his and his family's corruption. Mr. White is unaware of the supernatural powers that the monkey's paw possesses. He does not believe that %26quot;fate rules people's lives and those who interfere with it do so to their sorrow%26quot;(4). The paw changes the serene environment in the home to one that is full of sorrow. When the paw takes the life of Mr. White's only son, his views about the paw change drastically. The man does not want to have any connection with this dreadful talisman. In order to reverse the wish he gets %26quot;on his hands and knees grasps wildly on the floor in search of the paw%26quot;(8). The monkey's paw leaves Mr. White in a world full of sadness. He cries to his wife,%26quot;for heaven's sake do not let it in%26quot;(8). His attitude towards the paw takes an opposite turn from the time Mr. White first sees the paw. He learns the most important lesson from the paw that he should not interfere with fate again.
I think this last sentence is a good concluding sentence, but maybe you can make it a bit longer.
Mr. White learns an important lesson from the paw: he should not interfere with fate again because...
Good job! Good luck!
Mr. White changes his attitude toward the paw, from once a sence of curiosity to knowing that this paw is the source of his and his families’ corruption. Mr. White is unaware of the supernatural powers that the monkey's paw possesses. He does not believe that %26quot;fate rules people's lives an d those who interfere with it do so to their sorrow%26quot;(4). The paw changes the serene environment in the family to a home that is full of sorrow. When the paw takes the life of Mr. White's only son, his views about thepaw hange drastically. The man does not want to have any connection with this dreadful talisman. In order to reverse the wish he gets %26quot;on his hands and knees grapes wildly o the floor in search of the paw%26quot;(8). The monkey's paw leaves Mr. White in a world full of sadness. He cries to his wife,%26quot;for heavens sake do not let it in%26quot;(8). The attitude towards the paw takes an opposite turn from the time Mr. White first sees the paw. He learns the most important lesson from the paw that he should not interfere with faith again.
HELP WITH CONCLUDInG SENTENCE
Can you please correct my mistakes ex grammar, fragments run on sentences %26quot;MONKEYS PAW%26quot; best answer 10 pts?
I love this story. You need to talk more about how Mr. White feels about the paw at the start. Some sentence ideas would be:
When Mr. White first gets the monkey's paw, he....
Mr. White believes the paw is...
He hopes he will be able to...
Here is a corrected version of your paragraph:
Mr. White changes his attitude toward the paw, from a sense of curiosity to knowing that this paw is the source of his and his family's corruption. Mr. White is unaware of the supernatural powers that the monkey's paw possesses. He does not believe that %26quot;fate rules people's lives and those who interfere with it do so to their sorrow%26quot;(4). The paw changes the serene environment in the home to one that is full of sorrow. When the paw takes the life of Mr. White's only son, his views about the paw change drastically. The man does not want to have any connection with this dreadful talisman. In order to reverse the wish he gets %26quot;on his hands and knees grasps wildly on the floor in search of the paw%26quot;(8). The monkey's paw leaves Mr. White in a world full of sadness. He cries to his wife,%26quot;for heaven's sake do not let it in%26quot;(8). His attitude towards the paw takes an opposite turn from the time Mr. White first sees the paw. He learns the most important lesson from the paw that he should not interfere with fate again.
I think this last sentence is a good concluding sentence, but maybe you can make it a bit longer.
Mr. White learns an important lesson from the paw: he should not interfere with fate again because...
Good job! Good luck!
I need your opinion! Please!!!?
I'm writing a short novel of some sort, for fun, and I want your opinion. It is about a selfish woman who is in a car accident and is in the hospital. The man in the conflicting car is in the hospital bed beside her and he influences her in a good way and changes her, but he dies of some symptoms of the accident (don't worry it is not as corny as it sounds). He is a sort of John Doe type figure. Anyway, This is just the beginning part (before the actually story begins, like in the dedication part) so tell me what you think.
P.S. I'm only 13 so don't expect it to be a Pulitzer Prize winner.
Mary McCarthy once wrote, “We all live in suspense from day to day, from hour to hour; in other words, you are the hero of your own story.” From this I had concluded that I would be my own hero because nobody else could have an influence of my life if I didn’t want him or her to. But everybody has to be wrong once in a while, no matter how much you thought you were right. Things happen not by chance, but for a specific purpose that cannot be avoided. This is called fate and though one might not believe it is real, it helps others believe that is why things happen. This is a story about a hidden hero who emerged, not from out of anywhere, but from right beside me and made me believe that fate had some influence on people’s lives.
Here is the ending type thing, I know it is cliché, so please remember this is a rough draft.
As I look back on my life I remember the great Charles Dickens saying, %26quot;Whether I shall turn out to be the hero of my life, or whether that station will be held by anybody else, these pages must show.%26quot; I now know that the hero of my life was that man in the hospital. The man that showed me what life is really about. It is not about how big your house is, or how much money you have. It is about the people who allow you to be you and those who are there for you, even after they visit the pearly gates of heaven. John Doe has influenced my life and now I wish to influence someone else's because that is what life is really about.
I need your opinion! Please!!!?
I think that idea could be great. Sort of like the idea from the movie Pay It Forward.
Just don't get stuck in this ending. Let the ending flow from the rest of the story.
I need your opinion! Please!!!?
yeah :) it's really good
wow that was sort of touching, i think its great. i like writing stories for fun too! but i think you have talent
First of all, the whole premise is false. A hospital would never place a male and female in the same room. Even in an ER or ICU, the rooms are cordoned off.
I like it,
Its very detailed.
=]
sounds like a great story...keep up the good work:) thanks for answering my baby name question:)
Wow. I think it's really great. I'm 12, almost 13, and I love writing stories for fun. I think this is a great idea. Just by reading this I can tell you have a great talent for writing. Good luck with the rest of the story, and have fun with it.
? Julzsuite my skin tone baby ducks eat
P.S. I'm only 13 so don't expect it to be a Pulitzer Prize winner.
Mary McCarthy once wrote, “We all live in suspense from day to day, from hour to hour; in other words, you are the hero of your own story.” From this I had concluded that I would be my own hero because nobody else could have an influence of my life if I didn’t want him or her to. But everybody has to be wrong once in a while, no matter how much you thought you were right. Things happen not by chance, but for a specific purpose that cannot be avoided. This is called fate and though one might not believe it is real, it helps others believe that is why things happen. This is a story about a hidden hero who emerged, not from out of anywhere, but from right beside me and made me believe that fate had some influence on people’s lives.
Here is the ending type thing, I know it is cliché, so please remember this is a rough draft.
As I look back on my life I remember the great Charles Dickens saying, %26quot;Whether I shall turn out to be the hero of my life, or whether that station will be held by anybody else, these pages must show.%26quot; I now know that the hero of my life was that man in the hospital. The man that showed me what life is really about. It is not about how big your house is, or how much money you have. It is about the people who allow you to be you and those who are there for you, even after they visit the pearly gates of heaven. John Doe has influenced my life and now I wish to influence someone else's because that is what life is really about.
I need your opinion! Please!!!?
I think that idea could be great. Sort of like the idea from the movie Pay It Forward.
Just don't get stuck in this ending. Let the ending flow from the rest of the story.
I need your opinion! Please!!!?
yeah :) it's really good
wow that was sort of touching, i think its great. i like writing stories for fun too! but i think you have talent
First of all, the whole premise is false. A hospital would never place a male and female in the same room. Even in an ER or ICU, the rooms are cordoned off.
I like it,
Its very detailed.
=]
sounds like a great story...keep up the good work:) thanks for answering my baby name question:)
Wow. I think it's really great. I'm 12, almost 13, and I love writing stories for fun. I think this is a great idea. Just by reading this I can tell you have a great talent for writing. Good luck with the rest of the story, and have fun with it.
? Julz
I've been thinking...?
About how maybe sexuality isn't as rigid as people think it to be. I was wondering, all our other interests in life change as we age and mature, and gain new insights on our lives and others'. Why not people's interests in what they look for in a mate?
At first I thought I was gay but, I don't know, I think people classify themselves as 'gay' or 'straight' or 'bi' because that's just what society does- we label things to make it seem more black and white. We get ourselves in a mindset after a while to follow society's expectations, even if you don't realize it. Then you go your whole life thinking one way, even though your own personal tastes may swing one way to another.
Just my own personal thoughts. I'm only 16 so I don't have a lot of life experience to back this up, so any and all comments are welcome! Which I guess is mainly what I'm looking for- your thoughts on this. I didn't really ask a question :P
I've been thinking...?
Look up these key words: social psychology; sexology; Alfred Kinsey; queer theory.
I've been thinking...?
u r totally right. u r pretty wise and mature for ur age.
u shouldn't label urself. there's more to u than ur sexual orientation. u have ur own ideals, personality, goals, ambitions, dreams... all those things make you who u r, the things u like, the things u don't...
who u like to have sex with or who u don't... is just part of ur tastes -what u like/dislike, but doesn't define you as a person....
I consider myself to be gay because I know that I do not ever want to have sex with a women again. I have been with women but it has been a very long time.
You sound like a wise 16 year old!
Well, I agree that our interests in a mate may change over time. In my opinion, the best psychological theory about sexuality is that it is not black, white, or gray. But, rather, a continuum where one end is homosexuality and the other end is heterosexuality. In the area in between is a gradient of bisexuality. However, that is not to say that we go to sleep as a homosexual and wake up as a heterosexual. But rather, with more and more self discovery as life progresses, we may be more willing to engage in sexual behavior with one or both sexes.
Yeah!
Labels....hate em'...
Sorry I'm not good at answering back unless it's a question :P
At first I thought I was gay but, I don't know, I think people classify themselves as 'gay' or 'straight' or 'bi' because that's just what society does- we label things to make it seem more black and white. We get ourselves in a mindset after a while to follow society's expectations, even if you don't realize it. Then you go your whole life thinking one way, even though your own personal tastes may swing one way to another.
Just my own personal thoughts. I'm only 16 so I don't have a lot of life experience to back this up, so any and all comments are welcome! Which I guess is mainly what I'm looking for- your thoughts on this. I didn't really ask a question :P
I've been thinking...?
Look up these key words: social psychology; sexology; Alfred Kinsey; queer theory.
I've been thinking...?
u r totally right. u r pretty wise and mature for ur age.
u shouldn't label urself. there's more to u than ur sexual orientation. u have ur own ideals, personality, goals, ambitions, dreams... all those things make you who u r, the things u like, the things u don't...
who u like to have sex with or who u don't... is just part of ur tastes -what u like/dislike, but doesn't define you as a person....
I consider myself to be gay because I know that I do not ever want to have sex with a women again. I have been with women but it has been a very long time.
You sound like a wise 16 year old!
Well, I agree that our interests in a mate may change over time. In my opinion, the best psychological theory about sexuality is that it is not black, white, or gray. But, rather, a continuum where one end is homosexuality and the other end is heterosexuality. In the area in between is a gradient of bisexuality. However, that is not to say that we go to sleep as a homosexual and wake up as a heterosexual. But rather, with more and more self discovery as life progresses, we may be more willing to engage in sexual behavior with one or both sexes.
Yeah!
Labels....hate em'...
Sorry I'm not good at answering back unless it's a question :P
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I'm trying out to give a speech for my graduation tomorrow. Can you guys tell me if you like it. The theme is dare to be great. Thanks =]
Lets take a trip down memory lane for a moment; your first day of school, the first time you rode a bike by yourself, your first real vacation, moving to middle school, your first real crush, your first relationship, the first time you got behind the wheel, when our football team went to state last year TIDE FOOTBALL REPRESENT!, prom night, and tonight; June 5th, 2008 our graduation. All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.
Some people might think that graduating from high school is rather easy; I tend to disagree with that notion. On September 7th, 2004 I set foot on Liberty High Schools campus, I had the same thing in mind as I stuck my nametag on a huge piece of butcher paper that read the class of 2008. I look back now thinking how naive I was. At the tender age of fourteen school had always been easy for me; I got mostly A鈥檚 and only a few B鈥檚; I loved English, I hated math, I was involved in band, and sports I really enjoyed school up until that year.
By the time Christmas break rolled around that year, I dreaded getting up in the morning to get ready for school. It seemed as if my life had taken a spiral down the toilet. My grandma who I was very close with and had been until that point was terminally ill, I had to go visit her on the weekends in her hospital room and it鈥檚 hard to see somebody you love suffering so immensely at fourteen, when you can comprehend what鈥檚 going on. She ended up passing on that year. I lost touch with almost all my close friends in middle school and had no new friends at my new school. I was counting down the days until the summer of 2005.
School only got worse from that point on, sophomore year I had a lot of tough classes and had emotional break downs a few times a month. I wasn鈥檛 close with my teachers and they made life harder than it needed to be. Junior year was by far the worst year of my entire life. I hated school because I was harassed every single day; by teachers, by my peers, and I鈥檓 known as the peppy girl around school, well this time last year I鈥檇 come home and cry just about every single day last year. I didn鈥檛 recognize myself and honestly I thought that I鈥檇 never graduate because I hated school so much that I couldn鈥檛 go for the fear of getting beat up. My family didn鈥檛 recognize me; they鈥檇 ask me what had happened to our peppy Amanda, and I鈥檇 say she鈥檚 not here anymore; honestly I was miserable.
On Memorial day weekend last year, I decided that I needed a change. I remembered how much I used to love school and now I just knew that I wouldn鈥檛 graduate. So I decided to transfer schools. People thought I was nuts but I knew that I needed to do it.
Mrs. Laugner accepted my transfer and I came to Glencoe. I knew that if I hadn鈥檛 gotten that transfer accepted that I would have ended up dropping out. My first day of school my senior year was amazing. I was finally happy and the change was hard but I decided that I wanted to dare to be great.
Now I鈥檓 standing up here speaking to you; if I hadn鈥檛 dared to be great I could be flipping burgers at a fast food restaurant right now. I wouldn鈥檛 be attending my dream college in the fall, and I wouldn鈥檛 be pursuing a degree in education. I plan on becoming a teacher because I dare to make other people鈥檚 lives great.
So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. Not only do something great for yourselves, but make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life. I hope that my story inspired you guys so that you know that when life is tough that you can push through that and keep pressing forward towards your goal. Don鈥檛 ever give up on your dreams, don鈥檛 let anyone tell you that you can鈥檛 do it. But most importantly, dare to be great the class of 2008, dare to be great.
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aw its cute, i love it!
its def. a good speech for a graduation
and it really grabs the topic.
wonderful and congradulations %26amp; good luck!
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Sounds good to me congradulations!!
It doesn't have much to do with daring to be great but I love it! I think it's really good. I'm sure they will love it anyways :]
Good luck!
Dang do I really have to write a speech when I graduate? Crud...lol
wow!! that sounds really really good!! good luck and happy graduation
Thats really good!
Congrats!!
awww its really good =]
%26quot;All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.%26quot; - I found that sentence a little shaky, kind of like %26quot;I don't know how to transition myself into the next paragraph, so I'm just going to wing it.%26quot; The %26quot;but%26quot; contradicts what you are trying to say. I would change it to something along the lines of:
I will always cherish these events as fun memories, but I want to encourage everyone to strive for success even when life isn't fun ... Or something like that.
Get rid of %26quot;you guys%26quot;. It sounds very informal. I would change it to %26quot;all of you%26quot; or %26quot;my fellow classmates%26quot;.
%26quot;...and keep pressing forward towards your goal.%26quot; It should be %26quot;toward your goal%26quot;.
That's one heck of a lot of %26quot;dare to be greats%26quot;. It's a good theme, but don't abuse it. The more you say %26quot;dare to be great%26quot;, the more generic your speech sounds.
At the end, I wouldn't say %26quot;dare to be great%26quot; twice. I'm at a loss for how to close it, but what you have doesn't work very well. Maybe %26quot;dare to be the great class of 2008; I know you can do it%26quot; or something like that.
Lets take a trip down memory lane for a moment; your first day of school, the first time you rode a bike by yourself, your first real vacation, moving to middle school, your first real crush, your first relationship, the first time you got behind the wheel, when our football team went to state last year TIDE FOOTBALL REPRESENT!, prom night, and tonight; June 5th, 2008 our graduation. All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.
Some people might think that graduating from high school is rather easy; I tend to disagree with that notion. On September 7th, 2004 I set foot on Liberty High Schools campus, I had the same thing in mind as I stuck my nametag on a huge piece of butcher paper that read the class of 2008. I look back now thinking how naive I was. At the tender age of fourteen school had always been easy for me; I got mostly A鈥檚 and only a few B鈥檚; I loved English, I hated math, I was involved in band, and sports I really enjoyed school up until that year.
By the time Christmas break rolled around that year, I dreaded getting up in the morning to get ready for school. It seemed as if my life had taken a spiral down the toilet. My grandma who I was very close with and had been until that point was terminally ill, I had to go visit her on the weekends in her hospital room and it鈥檚 hard to see somebody you love suffering so immensely at fourteen, when you can comprehend what鈥檚 going on. She ended up passing on that year. I lost touch with almost all my close friends in middle school and had no new friends at my new school. I was counting down the days until the summer of 2005.
School only got worse from that point on, sophomore year I had a lot of tough classes and had emotional break downs a few times a month. I wasn鈥檛 close with my teachers and they made life harder than it needed to be. Junior year was by far the worst year of my entire life. I hated school because I was harassed every single day; by teachers, by my peers, and I鈥檓 known as the peppy girl around school, well this time last year I鈥檇 come home and cry just about every single day last year. I didn鈥檛 recognize myself and honestly I thought that I鈥檇 never graduate because I hated school so much that I couldn鈥檛 go for the fear of getting beat up. My family didn鈥檛 recognize me; they鈥檇 ask me what had happened to our peppy Amanda, and I鈥檇 say she鈥檚 not here anymore; honestly I was miserable.
On Memorial day weekend last year, I decided that I needed a change. I remembered how much I used to love school and now I just knew that I wouldn鈥檛 graduate. So I decided to transfer schools. People thought I was nuts but I knew that I needed to do it.
Mrs. Laugner accepted my transfer and I came to Glencoe. I knew that if I hadn鈥檛 gotten that transfer accepted that I would have ended up dropping out. My first day of school my senior year was amazing. I was finally happy and the change was hard but I decided that I wanted to dare to be great.
Now I鈥檓 standing up here speaking to you; if I hadn鈥檛 dared to be great I could be flipping burgers at a fast food restaurant right now. I wouldn鈥檛 be attending my dream college in the fall, and I wouldn鈥檛 be pursuing a degree in education. I plan on becoming a teacher because I dare to make other people鈥檚 lives great.
So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. Not only do something great for yourselves, but make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life. I hope that my story inspired you guys so that you know that when life is tough that you can push through that and keep pressing forward towards your goal. Don鈥檛 ever give up on your dreams, don鈥檛 let anyone tell you that you can鈥檛 do it. But most importantly, dare to be great the class of 2008, dare to be great.
Feedback anyone?
aw its cute, i love it!
its def. a good speech for a graduation
and it really grabs the topic.
wonderful and congradulations %26amp; good luck!
Feedback anyone?
Sounds good to me congradulations!!
It doesn't have much to do with daring to be great but I love it! I think it's really good. I'm sure they will love it anyways :]
Good luck!
Dang do I really have to write a speech when I graduate? Crud...lol
wow!! that sounds really really good!! good luck and happy graduation
Thats really good!
Congrats!!
awww its really good =]
%26quot;All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.%26quot; - I found that sentence a little shaky, kind of like %26quot;I don't know how to transition myself into the next paragraph, so I'm just going to wing it.%26quot; The %26quot;but%26quot; contradicts what you are trying to say. I would change it to something along the lines of:
I will always cherish these events as fun memories, but I want to encourage everyone to strive for success even when life isn't fun ... Or something like that.
Get rid of %26quot;you guys%26quot;. It sounds very informal. I would change it to %26quot;all of you%26quot; or %26quot;my fellow classmates%26quot;.
%26quot;...and keep pressing forward towards your goal.%26quot; It should be %26quot;toward your goal%26quot;.
That's one heck of a lot of %26quot;dare to be greats%26quot;. It's a good theme, but don't abuse it. The more you say %26quot;dare to be great%26quot;, the more generic your speech sounds.
At the end, I wouldn't say %26quot;dare to be great%26quot; twice. I'm at a loss for how to close it, but what you have doesn't work very well. Maybe %26quot;dare to be the great class of 2008; I know you can do it%26quot; or something like that.
Feedback anyone?
I'm trying out to give a speech for my graduation tomorrow. Can you guys tell me if you like it. The theme is dare to be great. Thanks =]
Lets take a trip down memory lane for a moment; your first day of school, the first time you rode a bike by yourself, your first real vacation, moving to middle school, your first real crush, your first relationship, the first time you got behind the wheel, when our football team went to state last year TIDE FOOTBALL REPRESENT!, prom night, and tonight; June 5th, 2008 our graduation. All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.
Some people might think that graduating from high school is rather easy; I tend to disagree with that notion. On September 7th, 2004 I set foot on Liberty High Schools campus, I had the same thing in mind as I stuck my nametag on a huge piece of butcher paper that read the class of 2008. I look back now thinking how naive I was. At the tender age of fourteen school had always been easy for me; I got mostly A鈥檚 and only a few B鈥檚; I loved English, I hated math, I was involved in band, and sports I really enjoyed school up until that year.
By the time Christmas break rolled around that year, I dreaded getting up in the morning to get ready for school. It seemed as if my life had taken a spiral down the toilet. My grandma who I was very close with and had been until that point was terminally ill, I had to go visit her on the weekends in her hospital room and it鈥檚 hard to see somebody you love suffering so immensely at fourteen, when you can comprehend what鈥檚 going on. She ended up passing on that year. I lost touch with almost all my close friends in middle school and had no new friends at my new school. I was counting down the days until the summer of 2005.
School only got worse from that point on, sophomore year I had a lot of tough classes and had emotional break downs a few times a month. I wasn鈥檛 close with my teachers and they made life harder than it needed to be. Junior year was by far the worst year of my entire life. I hated school because I was harassed every single day; by teachers, by my peers, and I鈥檓 known as the peppy girl around school, well this time last year I鈥檇 come home and cry just about every single day last year. I didn鈥檛 recognize myself and honestly I thought that I鈥檇 never graduate because I hated school so much that I couldn鈥檛 go for the fear of getting beat up. My family didn鈥檛 recognize me; they鈥檇 ask me what had happened to our peppy Amanda, and I鈥檇 say she鈥檚 not here anymore; honestly I was miserable.
On Memorial day weekend last year, I decided that I needed a change. I remembered how much I used to love school and now I just knew that I wouldn鈥檛 graduate. So I decided to transfer schools. People thought I was nuts but I knew that I needed to do it.
Mrs. Laugner accepted my transfer and I came to Glencoe. I knew that if I hadn鈥檛 gotten that transfer accepted that I would have ended up dropping out. My first day of school my senior year was amazing. I was finally happy and the change was hard but I decided that I wanted to dare to be great.
Now I鈥檓 standing up here speaking to you; if I hadn鈥檛 dared to be great I could be flipping burgers at a fast food restaurant right now. I wouldn鈥檛 be attending my dream college in the fall, and I wouldn鈥檛 be pursuing a degree in education. I plan on becoming a teacher because I dare to make other people鈥檚 lives great.
So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. Not only do something great for yourselves, but make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life. I hope that my story inspired you guys so that you know that when life is tough that you can push through that and keep pressing forward towards your goal. Don鈥檛 ever give up on your dreams, don鈥檛 let anyone tell you that you can鈥檛 do it. But most importantly, dare to be great the class of 2008, dare to be great.
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awsome speech may need a few modifications though love it
Feedback anyone?
Overall good. Sum up the personal aspects....remember you moved on to another school for a reason. 50% of your speech is about your struggle. I understand the point you want to get across, but the same point can be made in 2-3 short sentences.
Also, I suggest providing some example of what you consider %26quot;great%26quot; See below:
%26quot;So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. get a college degree, join the military, open a business, volunteer. Do something great for yourself...(pause)but (pause) make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life (pause) and it will improve the quality of your life AND another's.%26quot;
Add a joke in the beginning. This is after all your last chance to poke fun at a teacher! LOL.
Lets take a trip down memory lane for a moment; your first day of school, the first time you rode a bike by yourself, your first real vacation, moving to middle school, your first real crush, your first relationship, the first time you got behind the wheel, when our football team went to state last year TIDE FOOTBALL REPRESENT!, prom night, and tonight; June 5th, 2008 our graduation. All of these things were great memories that we will cherish forever, but I want to encourage everybody in this room to continue to dare to be great.
Some people might think that graduating from high school is rather easy; I tend to disagree with that notion. On September 7th, 2004 I set foot on Liberty High Schools campus, I had the same thing in mind as I stuck my nametag on a huge piece of butcher paper that read the class of 2008. I look back now thinking how naive I was. At the tender age of fourteen school had always been easy for me; I got mostly A鈥檚 and only a few B鈥檚; I loved English, I hated math, I was involved in band, and sports I really enjoyed school up until that year.
By the time Christmas break rolled around that year, I dreaded getting up in the morning to get ready for school. It seemed as if my life had taken a spiral down the toilet. My grandma who I was very close with and had been until that point was terminally ill, I had to go visit her on the weekends in her hospital room and it鈥檚 hard to see somebody you love suffering so immensely at fourteen, when you can comprehend what鈥檚 going on. She ended up passing on that year. I lost touch with almost all my close friends in middle school and had no new friends at my new school. I was counting down the days until the summer of 2005.
School only got worse from that point on, sophomore year I had a lot of tough classes and had emotional break downs a few times a month. I wasn鈥檛 close with my teachers and they made life harder than it needed to be. Junior year was by far the worst year of my entire life. I hated school because I was harassed every single day; by teachers, by my peers, and I鈥檓 known as the peppy girl around school, well this time last year I鈥檇 come home and cry just about every single day last year. I didn鈥檛 recognize myself and honestly I thought that I鈥檇 never graduate because I hated school so much that I couldn鈥檛 go for the fear of getting beat up. My family didn鈥檛 recognize me; they鈥檇 ask me what had happened to our peppy Amanda, and I鈥檇 say she鈥檚 not here anymore; honestly I was miserable.
On Memorial day weekend last year, I decided that I needed a change. I remembered how much I used to love school and now I just knew that I wouldn鈥檛 graduate. So I decided to transfer schools. People thought I was nuts but I knew that I needed to do it.
Mrs. Laugner accepted my transfer and I came to Glencoe. I knew that if I hadn鈥檛 gotten that transfer accepted that I would have ended up dropping out. My first day of school my senior year was amazing. I was finally happy and the change was hard but I decided that I wanted to dare to be great.
Now I鈥檓 standing up here speaking to you; if I hadn鈥檛 dared to be great I could be flipping burgers at a fast food restaurant right now. I wouldn鈥檛 be attending my dream college in the fall, and I wouldn鈥檛 be pursuing a degree in education. I plan on becoming a teacher because I dare to make other people鈥檚 lives great.
So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. Not only do something great for yourselves, but make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life. I hope that my story inspired you guys so that you know that when life is tough that you can push through that and keep pressing forward towards your goal. Don鈥檛 ever give up on your dreams, don鈥檛 let anyone tell you that you can鈥檛 do it. But most importantly, dare to be great the class of 2008, dare to be great.
Feedback anyone?
awsome speech may need a few modifications though love it
Feedback anyone?
Overall good. Sum up the personal aspects....remember you moved on to another school for a reason. 50% of your speech is about your struggle. I understand the point you want to get across, but the same point can be made in 2-3 short sentences.
Also, I suggest providing some example of what you consider %26quot;great%26quot; See below:
%26quot;So I鈥檓 encouraging you, the class of 2008 to go out there and do something great. get a college degree, join the military, open a business, volunteer. Do something great for yourself...(pause)but (pause) make a difference in somebody else鈥檚 life (pause) and it will improve the quality of your life AND another's.%26quot;
Add a joke in the beginning. This is after all your last chance to poke fun at a teacher! LOL.
Hrm... How does this rough draft of The Aeneid look?
so i've finally finished my essay and i was wondering you guys think about it. The topic question i chose was.... The end of the Aeneid (Bk.12. 1094-1113) shows the epic hero behaving in a manner that seems to contradict Anchises’ advice to Aeneas in Book Six, “to spare the defeated, break the proud in war” (6. 984). After all, at this moment, Turnus has been defeated and is humbly supplicating Aeneas for mercy. On the other hand, Turnus has also been pompous and brazen in his killing of Pallas and wearing his belt (see Book 10.563-602). In your opinion, does Aeneas respect his father’s words and does his piety to Evander, the father of Pallas (see Book 8; and Book 11, lines 174-215, especially 208-215), justify his killing of Turnus? Or does Aeneas’ suppressed rage break free here, revealing him as subject to the forces of irrational passion that Juno has represented throughout the epic? What are the implications of this end to Virgil's great epic of empire?
Throughout the The Aeneid, one of the main motif in the book is the act of vengeance. The play has different examples of acts of vengeance like Dido cursing out Aeneas before she commits suicide. Since vengeance is a motif in the book that is clearly presented at the end of the book when Turnus is begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas. At this point Aeneas was going to spare Turnus’ life but recognizes a sword belt that belonged to Pallas. Though Anchises request that Aeneas “to spare the defeated, break the proud in war” (The Aeneid, 6.984) he went out of his way to kill Turnus in the act of vengeance for Evander and himself. In two different cases, Aeneas kills the people that are begging for their lives to be spared shortly after the reminder that Pallas had been slain. The love that Aeneas has for Pallas is so deep that anything that reminds him of Pallas’ death, it relinquishes all his desire to fulfill Anchises request to spare people’s lives.
In the middle of a battle, all the rules are out of the books and there can only be one side that can win the battle. Death is essential in a war. If Aeneas let every person go that had begged their life for mercy then he should have also spared Magus’ life “I beg of you now by your father’s ghost… spare this life of mine… Now how can a Trojan victory hinge on me? How can a single life make such a difference?” (The Aeneid, 10.619-626). Shortly after the death of Pallas it is shown that Aeneas went on a rampage killing every soul and even ones that were begging for their lives to be spared. Though Aeneas is terribly upset over the death of Pallas he shows that he can still reason with the people that are begging for their lives. “All those bars of silver and gold you brag of, save them for your sons! Such bargaining in battle, Turnus already cut it short when he cut Pallas down! So the ghost of my father, so my son declares” ( The Aeneid, 10:627-631). Shortly after telling Magus that his material he possess is worthless, he strikes him down and moves on with his rampage. Aeneas is so terribly upset that he changes the tides of the war constantly throughout the chapter. In his quest to find Turnus in the battlefield the gods had to intervene to stop the rampage that was set upon Aeneas. His love for Pallas so great that Aeneas did not care about what people begged of him, he was in the middle of a war and there are no exceptions to letting the enemy live. It was more cowardly on Magus’ behalf to beg for mercy on his life.
The death of Turnus is justified even though he lay there begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas. The suppressed rage before Aeneas kills Turnus was at the perfect time. “Aeneas, ferocious in armor, stood there, still, shifting his gaze, and held his sword-arm back, holding himself back too as Turnus’ words began to sway him more and more…” (The Aeneid, 12:1094-1097). At this point in time Aeneas was ready to spare his adversaries life but shortly after warming up and rationalizing with himself to spare Turnus’ life, he notices the sword-belt that is attached to his shoulder. “… he caught sight of the fateful sword-belt of Pallas… soon as his eyes drank in that plunder-- keepsake of his own savage grief--flaring up in a fury, terrible in his rage, he cries” (The Aeneid, 12:1097-1099) From there the story tells itself that Aeneas’ suppressed rage did break free but it has to do more with the passionate love that is represented by Venus than the irrational passion of Juno. It is not like he just exploded out of nowhere and decided to kill Turnus for the sake of killing. He chose to kill Turnus because he was reminded of Pallas; the man he loved dearly.
If Turnus was not pompous and left had Pallas’ body as it was, the result of Turnus begging for his life could have been drastically different. It was through his arrogance that left him dead because he took a piece of equipment that Aeneas recognized to be a possession of Pallas. “With that, he stampe
Hrm... How does this rough draft of The Aeneid look?
I think you need to tighten up your thesis statement at the beginning and give one more example of vengeance to go with Dido, preferably one either milder or more extreme. Something like: Vengeance is one of the main motifs of The Aeneid, from Dido's dying curse to ____________. The climax of this theme occurs at the end when Turnus is begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas.
The ending was cut off but the rest seems soundly reasoned.
Throughout the The Aeneid, one of the main motif in the book is the act of vengeance. The play has different examples of acts of vengeance like Dido cursing out Aeneas before she commits suicide. Since vengeance is a motif in the book that is clearly presented at the end of the book when Turnus is begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas. At this point Aeneas was going to spare Turnus’ life but recognizes a sword belt that belonged to Pallas. Though Anchises request that Aeneas “to spare the defeated, break the proud in war” (The Aeneid, 6.984) he went out of his way to kill Turnus in the act of vengeance for Evander and himself. In two different cases, Aeneas kills the people that are begging for their lives to be spared shortly after the reminder that Pallas had been slain. The love that Aeneas has for Pallas is so deep that anything that reminds him of Pallas’ death, it relinquishes all his desire to fulfill Anchises request to spare people’s lives.
In the middle of a battle, all the rules are out of the books and there can only be one side that can win the battle. Death is essential in a war. If Aeneas let every person go that had begged their life for mercy then he should have also spared Magus’ life “I beg of you now by your father’s ghost… spare this life of mine… Now how can a Trojan victory hinge on me? How can a single life make such a difference?” (The Aeneid, 10.619-626). Shortly after the death of Pallas it is shown that Aeneas went on a rampage killing every soul and even ones that were begging for their lives to be spared. Though Aeneas is terribly upset over the death of Pallas he shows that he can still reason with the people that are begging for their lives. “All those bars of silver and gold you brag of, save them for your sons! Such bargaining in battle, Turnus already cut it short when he cut Pallas down! So the ghost of my father, so my son declares” ( The Aeneid, 10:627-631). Shortly after telling Magus that his material he possess is worthless, he strikes him down and moves on with his rampage. Aeneas is so terribly upset that he changes the tides of the war constantly throughout the chapter. In his quest to find Turnus in the battlefield the gods had to intervene to stop the rampage that was set upon Aeneas. His love for Pallas so great that Aeneas did not care about what people begged of him, he was in the middle of a war and there are no exceptions to letting the enemy live. It was more cowardly on Magus’ behalf to beg for mercy on his life.
The death of Turnus is justified even though he lay there begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas. The suppressed rage before Aeneas kills Turnus was at the perfect time. “Aeneas, ferocious in armor, stood there, still, shifting his gaze, and held his sword-arm back, holding himself back too as Turnus’ words began to sway him more and more…” (The Aeneid, 12:1094-1097). At this point in time Aeneas was ready to spare his adversaries life but shortly after warming up and rationalizing with himself to spare Turnus’ life, he notices the sword-belt that is attached to his shoulder. “… he caught sight of the fateful sword-belt of Pallas… soon as his eyes drank in that plunder-- keepsake of his own savage grief--flaring up in a fury, terrible in his rage, he cries” (The Aeneid, 12:1097-1099) From there the story tells itself that Aeneas’ suppressed rage did break free but it has to do more with the passionate love that is represented by Venus than the irrational passion of Juno. It is not like he just exploded out of nowhere and decided to kill Turnus for the sake of killing. He chose to kill Turnus because he was reminded of Pallas; the man he loved dearly.
If Turnus was not pompous and left had Pallas’ body as it was, the result of Turnus begging for his life could have been drastically different. It was through his arrogance that left him dead because he took a piece of equipment that Aeneas recognized to be a possession of Pallas. “With that, he stampe
Hrm... How does this rough draft of The Aeneid look?
I think you need to tighten up your thesis statement at the beginning and give one more example of vengeance to go with Dido, preferably one either milder or more extreme. Something like: Vengeance is one of the main motifs of The Aeneid, from Dido's dying curse to ____________. The climax of this theme occurs at the end when Turnus is begging for his life to be spared by Aeneas.
The ending was cut off but the rest seems soundly reasoned.
Can you check my grammar errors and make them correct?
im not an native speakers so i got a lot of erros. could you make them correct? thank you
Being a Pretty Person
Today, the plastic surgery isn鈥檛 strange thing to do. We could see many people who had a plastic surgery around our school, workplace, or neighborhood. Today鈥檚 beauty is more concentration to outer beauty. Many people want to change their appearance to satisfy by themselves from child to adult. What are the causes to increasing that people want to do plastic surgery?
One of causes is the globalization of the beauty. Every country and culture had different criterion for beauty. For example, in the country of Myanmar, long neck is considered as symbol of beauty. However, nowadays, individual criterion of beauty has disappeared since globalization. Criterion for beauty united one that has a pretty appearance like models in magazines.
Another cause is prejudice of beauty. People prefer pretty faces whether we like it or not. Even Some people are afraid of ugly people. Specially, Man prefers more pretty face than woman prefers, so woman does more plastic surgery than man does. So, many people did plastic surgery because of people鈥檚 wrong concepts of the beauty.
Job is also one of causes. The job market and society accept more people who are with good features than people who are with bad features. In economy crisis, job stands as important part of people鈥檚 life. So, People will do whatever things if they can get a job. Thus, people trying to change their appearance with plastic surgery.
Most of cause is the broadcasting. Every day, we see a beautiful people on the television, movie, or magazines; likewise, actresses, actors, singers and models. Do you know what they have in common? Yes, they have a small face, big eyes, high nose, white skin and skinny body. Also, they have a plastic surgery, too. Many people admire them, especially teenagers. They are the idol of us now; many people want to be like Hollywood stars. People think they could be like Hollywood stars if they change their appearance by undergo the plastic surgery.
Many reasons cause to do plastic surgery; globalization, prejudice, job, and broadcasting. Then, what are the effects from these causes?
There are that plastic surgery could bring negative effect. By increasing a number of plastic surgery procedures, cost of plastic surgery is expensive, too. The cost of plastic surgery is from $6000 to $12000. How could people afford this money to do plastic surgery? This means people can鈥檛 be a pretty person without money in present. However, that doesn鈥檛 matter. People will bring money to be a pretty person no matter how much costs are.
Once people had plastic surgery, people addicted to the plastic surgery. Whether procedures have succeeded or failed, people want to do plastic surgery again. People, who succeeded plastic surgery, will find another drawback that needs a plastic surgery from their body. People, who failed plastic surgery, will do plastic surgery to fix their failed part again. Therefore, it will cause that have problems with their health condition. It will obtain extra health problem from the plastic surgery.
Any surgery is potentially dangerous, including plastic surgery. It happened rare, but it sometimes leads to many serious problems, even death, because of a bad reaction to have plastic surgery. That is, if accident happened because of plastic surgery, people are not only pain their body but also lose their jobs, confidence and, even, their lives.
Although people see lots of news about side effects of plastic surgery, they still want to do it. Why they decide to do plastic surgery even they accept that danger?
First, people who undergo the plastic surgery could have lots of opportunities. For example, if you are more beautiful and handsome by plastic surgery, when you have a job interview, you could give a good impression to interviewer. If there are applicants who have a same ability, the interviewer will choose you as a new employee, and vice versa. Also, there are opportunities to choose your future spouse, too.
Second, if people undergo the plastic surgery, they could gain self confidence. People who change their appearance that they want love by themselves, and that is self confidence. People could also mend their character from negative to positive, because they make up their faults. In addition, they could change their life due to self confidence.
Last, people who undergo the plastic surgery could have sociable personality. People will come to you because you are beautiful as other who had pretty appearance. So, it is good way to get friends and lovers. Then, by meeting many people, you should more outgoing and sociable person. And you can be a person who everybody loved.
According to these reasons, people want to undergo plastic surgery, (and the number of plastic surgery getting increase). Being a pretty person has to receive both positive effects and negative effe
Can you check my grammar errors and make them correct?
Well, it's much, much too long to go over and correct. But looking at the last line, you have stopped in the middle of a word. That's not a great idea.
Can you check my grammar errors and make them correct?
Maybe if it was shorter . . .ideal marriage age ittwit
Being a Pretty Person
Today, the plastic surgery isn鈥檛 strange thing to do. We could see many people who had a plastic surgery around our school, workplace, or neighborhood. Today鈥檚 beauty is more concentration to outer beauty. Many people want to change their appearance to satisfy by themselves from child to adult. What are the causes to increasing that people want to do plastic surgery?
One of causes is the globalization of the beauty. Every country and culture had different criterion for beauty. For example, in the country of Myanmar, long neck is considered as symbol of beauty. However, nowadays, individual criterion of beauty has disappeared since globalization. Criterion for beauty united one that has a pretty appearance like models in magazines.
Another cause is prejudice of beauty. People prefer pretty faces whether we like it or not. Even Some people are afraid of ugly people. Specially, Man prefers more pretty face than woman prefers, so woman does more plastic surgery than man does. So, many people did plastic surgery because of people鈥檚 wrong concepts of the beauty.
Job is also one of causes. The job market and society accept more people who are with good features than people who are with bad features. In economy crisis, job stands as important part of people鈥檚 life. So, People will do whatever things if they can get a job. Thus, people trying to change their appearance with plastic surgery.
Most of cause is the broadcasting. Every day, we see a beautiful people on the television, movie, or magazines; likewise, actresses, actors, singers and models. Do you know what they have in common? Yes, they have a small face, big eyes, high nose, white skin and skinny body. Also, they have a plastic surgery, too. Many people admire them, especially teenagers. They are the idol of us now; many people want to be like Hollywood stars. People think they could be like Hollywood stars if they change their appearance by undergo the plastic surgery.
Many reasons cause to do plastic surgery; globalization, prejudice, job, and broadcasting. Then, what are the effects from these causes?
There are that plastic surgery could bring negative effect. By increasing a number of plastic surgery procedures, cost of plastic surgery is expensive, too. The cost of plastic surgery is from $6000 to $12000. How could people afford this money to do plastic surgery? This means people can鈥檛 be a pretty person without money in present. However, that doesn鈥檛 matter. People will bring money to be a pretty person no matter how much costs are.
Once people had plastic surgery, people addicted to the plastic surgery. Whether procedures have succeeded or failed, people want to do plastic surgery again. People, who succeeded plastic surgery, will find another drawback that needs a plastic surgery from their body. People, who failed plastic surgery, will do plastic surgery to fix their failed part again. Therefore, it will cause that have problems with their health condition. It will obtain extra health problem from the plastic surgery.
Any surgery is potentially dangerous, including plastic surgery. It happened rare, but it sometimes leads to many serious problems, even death, because of a bad reaction to have plastic surgery. That is, if accident happened because of plastic surgery, people are not only pain their body but also lose their jobs, confidence and, even, their lives.
Although people see lots of news about side effects of plastic surgery, they still want to do it. Why they decide to do plastic surgery even they accept that danger?
First, people who undergo the plastic surgery could have lots of opportunities. For example, if you are more beautiful and handsome by plastic surgery, when you have a job interview, you could give a good impression to interviewer. If there are applicants who have a same ability, the interviewer will choose you as a new employee, and vice versa. Also, there are opportunities to choose your future spouse, too.
Second, if people undergo the plastic surgery, they could gain self confidence. People who change their appearance that they want love by themselves, and that is self confidence. People could also mend their character from negative to positive, because they make up their faults. In addition, they could change their life due to self confidence.
Last, people who undergo the plastic surgery could have sociable personality. People will come to you because you are beautiful as other who had pretty appearance. So, it is good way to get friends and lovers. Then, by meeting many people, you should more outgoing and sociable person. And you can be a person who everybody loved.
According to these reasons, people want to undergo plastic surgery, (and the number of plastic surgery getting increase). Being a pretty person has to receive both positive effects and negative effe
Can you check my grammar errors and make them correct?
Well, it's much, much too long to go over and correct. But looking at the last line, you have stopped in the middle of a word. That's not a great idea.
Can you check my grammar errors and make them correct?
Maybe if it was shorter . . .
Bullying & it's consequences?
When I was in college, there was a very quiet and innocent classmate of mine. He unfortunately never had a social group for himself as he was very quiet %26amp; reserved. As it turned out, a group of guys in the class started picking on him %26amp; attacking him physically - it made him completely paranoid %26amp; trembling in fear. He tried reporting this to the college authorities, but in vain – they would simply laugh it off everytime. This happened on a regular basis for about a year.
The next year, this guy completely changed – from being shy and innocent to very strong and intimidating. One day he confronted the group of bullies %26amp; he beat them up very badly with a bat. The victims were hospitalized %26amp; the police pressed charges against him. However after support from us %26amp; the authorities, the charges were dropped against him %26amp; the bullies. The bullies were kicked out of college, while this guy was handed a one-year suspension.
After he returned, we thought he would have become mature – but he didn’t. He was still as angry and intimidating as he was the last year. His acquired ‘bad guy’ attitude earned him a very bad name in college %26amp; talks were going around that he used to bring knives and weapons %26amp; threaten the staff. Eventually, action was taken against him and he was kicked out of college. Today, the poor guy has been struggling to find a decent job because he doesn’t have a decent degree.
My question to all of you is why does bullying go on even to this day, the 21st century? And why does anyone not take effort to stop this malpractice from ruining innocent people’s lives? And what do the bullies really want from all of this – to change the innocent victim’s behavior so that he can kick their asses %26amp; kick others asses as well that will destroy his future completely?
Bullying %26amp; it's consequences?
Two wrongs do not make a right,in this case anyway...Life is what you make it despite the influences that may have effects on it..This dudes %26quot;bad guy%26quot; attitude is a reflection and reaction to how he was treated by bullies,yet he chose destruction rather than success
once he had a chance to rectify it...Bullies are outrageous,not to mention immature behavior,and their purpose in life is over rated,but in the long run, life itself will bring dismay to their own lives if it progresses into adulthood...Karma has a way of equaling
out the good %26amp; bad..=)
The next year, this guy completely changed – from being shy and innocent to very strong and intimidating. One day he confronted the group of bullies %26amp; he beat them up very badly with a bat. The victims were hospitalized %26amp; the police pressed charges against him. However after support from us %26amp; the authorities, the charges were dropped against him %26amp; the bullies. The bullies were kicked out of college, while this guy was handed a one-year suspension.
After he returned, we thought he would have become mature – but he didn’t. He was still as angry and intimidating as he was the last year. His acquired ‘bad guy’ attitude earned him a very bad name in college %26amp; talks were going around that he used to bring knives and weapons %26amp; threaten the staff. Eventually, action was taken against him and he was kicked out of college. Today, the poor guy has been struggling to find a decent job because he doesn’t have a decent degree.
My question to all of you is why does bullying go on even to this day, the 21st century? And why does anyone not take effort to stop this malpractice from ruining innocent people’s lives? And what do the bullies really want from all of this – to change the innocent victim’s behavior so that he can kick their asses %26amp; kick others asses as well that will destroy his future completely?
Bullying %26amp; it's consequences?
Two wrongs do not make a right,in this case anyway...Life is what you make it despite the influences that may have effects on it..This dudes %26quot;bad guy%26quot; attitude is a reflection and reaction to how he was treated by bullies,yet he chose destruction rather than success
once he had a chance to rectify it...Bullies are outrageous,not to mention immature behavior,and their purpose in life is over rated,but in the long run, life itself will bring dismay to their own lives if it progresses into adulthood...Karma has a way of equaling
out the good %26amp; bad..=)
Who can I call ? to ask about this
Ok so I have a friend that lives in all bill paid apartments ,she just moved in .in July.. well come to find out this month, they were in the process of all ready selling the apartments, and didn't let her know when she moved in.. well the new apartment owners, is trying to change the apartments into a not all bill paid apartments, next month(Sept) and half of the residents that live in the complex is spanish speaking only. now can they just up and change people's leases like that? they want residents to pay $700.00 a month and for what the apartments look like they are or not worth no more then $600.00 a month. who can i call and talk to about this.
Who can I call ? to ask about this
A real estate agent.
Housing prices are way low now and it would be a perfect time for your friend to buy a home of her own.
Keep this in mind.
If your friend is going to continue to pay others for the privilege to live in their house than she must pay what they ask. I'm sure there are some places where your friend can go and complain but the bottom line is the apartment she lives in belongs to someone else.
People should be allowed to ask what they want for the rent on property they own.
Your friend has the right to move somewhere else.
Tell her to buy her own property and she can do with it whatever she wants.
Who can I call ? to ask about this
Not sure of where you live, but when you buy a business, you buy the existing contracts (leases) that are existing. That is the law in my state. When the existing contracts are up, they can be changed. I had the same thing with a quad that I bought a few years ago. I had to honor the existing leases, although I could control the thermostat %26amp; restrict car washing with common water. Have her contact an attorney that deals in realestate.
If your friend has a lease, the landlord's out of luck until the lease expires unless the lease agreement specifically allows rent increases before the end.
She doesn't have to call anyone - she just continues to pay her agreed rent, no matter what the new landlord says.
Depends where you live, all counties opperate differently and have different laws, although some are federal so all states, cities %26amp; counties have to abide.
Try contacting your local Legal Aid office or any housing rights organization in your town - you're looking for the categories of:
Landlord/tenant
housing rights
MAKE SURE YOU HAVE A COPY OF THE SIGNED LEASE
The lease must be honored for the life of the lease. When it is time to renew the lease, they have a right to up the rent.
Contact a real estate attorney, or contact the HOA especially if you feel this is an ethnic issue (you mentioned their ethnicity).
don't she have a lease? i imagine the new owner has to honour the terms and conditions. call all most any law firm, they usually offer a free 15 min consultation.
A lease is a contract and regardless of what a landlord wants to do they must honor the contract for its duration. Have your friend read their lease. The landlord can only change terms that the lease allows. When the lease expires then they can change whatever they like in a new one but until the lease is up the landlord is bound by it just as your friend is. I have never heard of a state within the United States where this isn't true.
So first read the lease to see exactly what is or isn't allowed. Then, if the landlord attempts to change terms that are not allowed have your friend contact a lawyer. One other thing to tell your friend is that if the lease protects form a rent increase or utility billing then do not comply with a landlords demand to pay it. Call the lawyer after warning the landlord that they will do so.
Who can I call ? to ask about this
A real estate agent.
Housing prices are way low now and it would be a perfect time for your friend to buy a home of her own.
Keep this in mind.
If your friend is going to continue to pay others for the privilege to live in their house than she must pay what they ask. I'm sure there are some places where your friend can go and complain but the bottom line is the apartment she lives in belongs to someone else.
People should be allowed to ask what they want for the rent on property they own.
Your friend has the right to move somewhere else.
Tell her to buy her own property and she can do with it whatever she wants.
Who can I call ? to ask about this
Not sure of where you live, but when you buy a business, you buy the existing contracts (leases) that are existing. That is the law in my state. When the existing contracts are up, they can be changed. I had the same thing with a quad that I bought a few years ago. I had to honor the existing leases, although I could control the thermostat %26amp; restrict car washing with common water. Have her contact an attorney that deals in realestate.
If your friend has a lease, the landlord's out of luck until the lease expires unless the lease agreement specifically allows rent increases before the end.
She doesn't have to call anyone - she just continues to pay her agreed rent, no matter what the new landlord says.
Depends where you live, all counties opperate differently and have different laws, although some are federal so all states, cities %26amp; counties have to abide.
Try contacting your local Legal Aid office or any housing rights organization in your town - you're looking for the categories of:
Landlord/tenant
housing rights
MAKE SURE YOU HAVE A COPY OF THE SIGNED LEASE
The lease must be honored for the life of the lease. When it is time to renew the lease, they have a right to up the rent.
Contact a real estate attorney, or contact the HOA especially if you feel this is an ethnic issue (you mentioned their ethnicity).
don't she have a lease? i imagine the new owner has to honour the terms and conditions. call all most any law firm, they usually offer a free 15 min consultation.
A lease is a contract and regardless of what a landlord wants to do they must honor the contract for its duration. Have your friend read their lease. The landlord can only change terms that the lease allows. When the lease expires then they can change whatever they like in a new one but until the lease is up the landlord is bound by it just as your friend is. I have never heard of a state within the United States where this isn't true.
So first read the lease to see exactly what is or isn't allowed. Then, if the landlord attempts to change terms that are not allowed have your friend contact a lawyer. One other thing to tell your friend is that if the lease protects form a rent increase or utility billing then do not comply with a landlords demand to pay it. Call the lawyer after warning the landlord that they will do so.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
Nowadays, along with the development of technology, some people are confused whether they are still in charge of technology or not. Furthermore, many films have already described a war between human being and robot in the future. Can it become reality? A large number of people tend to live under the illusion that men are able to control technology. However, other people express a strong desire to state that technology will be out of control in one day.
Despite of the rapid evolution, technology is based on human being鈥檚 knowledge all the time. Without the advanced knowledge and science, technology can鈥檛 create such a tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on people鈥檚 purpose. Hence, people exert great effects on technology, which directly determine that human will always drive the change of technology.
Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is necessary. It is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an extreme essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, for example, using car in stead of walk, talking with neighbour by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to use kinds of technology to replace the traditional life style. It must be admitted that majority of people can鈥檛 live without modern technology.
From what has been discussed above, people should utilize technology in an appropriate way, not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without mobile, car, and computer. How to deal with the relationship between technology and life is important to everyone.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
I have proofread your paragraphs thoroughly. You did an excellent job, but I have made many changes. I have to admit that there were a few sentences that I did not understand (not many) and I did the best I could with those. I hope I did not change your meaning in those cases, so you should proofread my proofreading. The only thing I did nothing about was that you use the word technology a lot--too much, in fact. I am sending you a link for a thesaurus which will give you different words that you can substitute. I would rather you do this because you know exactly what you want to say better than I do. However, you really did an excellent job and you should be very proud of yourself. I've tried to learn other languages and I can't do anything compared to what you have done. Best of luck to you.
As technology develops, some people become confused about whether or not they are still in charge of technology. Furthermore, many films have already described a war between human beings and robots in the future. Can it become reality? A large number of people tend to live under the illusion that men are able to control technology. However, others express a strong belief that technology will be out of control in one day.
Technology is based upon what we know at any given time. Without advanced knowledge of science, technology can鈥檛 make tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on what purposes need to be served. Hence, people exert great effects on what they want to accomplish, which is assurance that humans will always drive the change of technology.
Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is logical. There is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, For example, they will a car instead of walking, they talk with neighbours by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to replace what they have traditionally done with newer life styles. It must be admitted that majority of people cannot live without modern technology.
From this discussion, this writer believes that people should utilize technology in an controlled way, and not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without telephones, cars, or computers. We must all learn how to deal with the relationship between technology and life.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW TOOOOOOOOOOOOOO LONG!!!! LOOKS IMPRESIVE A*
You did an excellent job there is nothing to correct. If I were your teacher I would give you an A++++++++
human being's shudnt have a s after being other than that it looks like a A GRADE essay
Corrections :-
other people express a strong desire to state that technology will be out of control one day
Despite of the rapid evolution, technology is based on human being鈥檚 knowledge all the time. Without the advanced knowledge and science, technology can鈥檛 create such a tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on people鈥檚 purpose. Hence, people exert great effects on technology, which directly determine that human will always drive the change of technology.
Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is necessary. It is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an extreme essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, for example, using car in stead of walk, talking with neighbour by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to use kinds of technology to replace the traditional life style. It must be admitted that majority of people can鈥檛 live without modern technology.
From what has been discussed above, people should utilize technology in an appropriate way, not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without mobile, car, and computer. How to deal with the relationship between technology and life is important to everyone.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
I have proofread your paragraphs thoroughly. You did an excellent job, but I have made many changes. I have to admit that there were a few sentences that I did not understand (not many) and I did the best I could with those. I hope I did not change your meaning in those cases, so you should proofread my proofreading. The only thing I did nothing about was that you use the word technology a lot--too much, in fact. I am sending you a link for a thesaurus which will give you different words that you can substitute. I would rather you do this because you know exactly what you want to say better than I do. However, you really did an excellent job and you should be very proud of yourself. I've tried to learn other languages and I can't do anything compared to what you have done. Best of luck to you.
As technology develops, some people become confused about whether or not they are still in charge of technology. Furthermore, many films have already described a war between human beings and robots in the future. Can it become reality? A large number of people tend to live under the illusion that men are able to control technology. However, others express a strong belief that technology will be out of control in one day.
Technology is based upon what we know at any given time. Without advanced knowledge of science, technology can鈥檛 make tremendous progress. Moreover, technology is used to make people鈥檚 lives convenient and wonderful, so it depends on what purposes need to be served. Hence, people exert great effects on what they want to accomplish, which is assurance that humans will always drive the change of technology.
Of course, the worry about losing control of technology is logical. There is no doubt that our society is dramatically changed by modern technology, and technology plays an essential role in our lives. People are much lazier than before, For example, they will a car instead of walking, they talk with neighbours by telephone, and so on. There is a growing tendency for people to replace what they have traditionally done with newer life styles. It must be admitted that majority of people cannot live without modern technology.
From this discussion, this writer believes that people should utilize technology in an controlled way, and not rely on it totally. Sometimes try to enjoy lives without telephones, cars, or computers. We must all learn how to deal with the relationship between technology and life.
I have an essay, However, i am a new learner for english, who can edit it for me ? Thank you !?
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW TOOOOOOOOOOOOOO LONG!!!! LOOKS IMPRESIVE A*
You did an excellent job there is nothing to correct. If I were your teacher I would give you an A++++++++
human being's shudnt have a s after being other than that it looks like a A GRADE essay
Corrections :-
other people express a strong desire to state that technology will be out of control one day
Can someone please edit my essay?
Our collective well being is improved if we live in a peaceful, flourishing, supportive society, so promoting well being should be a public as well as a personal task. Well being is more than just happiness. It is about having meaning in our lives, developing as a person and feeling that our lives are fulfilling and worthwhile. Well being comes from having a web of relationships and interests. Family and friends, agencies and communities all can increase our well being. Our relationships also provide for our most basic human needs. While helping us to have a fulfilling life, our relationships help us to live our lives to the fullest potential. Through our relationships, we are sustained in our personal growth and development. Our relationships are the substance to how each of us grow and interact with each other. The relationship substance strengthens our bonds and builds trust. As we grow, we learn from life experiences after leaving our parents.
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.
Can someone please edit my essay?
ok........................ it look good.
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.
Can someone please edit my essay?
ok........................ it look good.
Can someone please edit my essay?
Our collective well being is improved if we live in a peaceful, flourishing, supportive society, so promoting well being should be a public as well as a personal task. Well being is more than just happiness. It is about having meaning in our lives, developing as a person and feeling that our lives are fulfilling and worthwhile. Well being comes from having a web of relationships and interests. Family and friends, agencies and communities all can increase our well being. Our relationships also provide for our most basic human needs. While helping us to have a fulfilling life, our relationships help us to live our lives to the fullest potential. Through our relationships, we are sustained in our personal growth and development. Our relationships are the substance to how each of us grow and interact with each other. The relationship substance strengthens our bonds and builds trust. As we grow, we learn from life experiences after leaving our parents.
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.
Can someone please edit my essay?
%26quot;Our collective well being is improved if we live in a peaceful, flourishing, supportive society, so promoting well being should be a public as well as a personal task. Well being is more than just happiness. It is about having meaning in our lives, developing as a person and feeling that our lives are fulfilling and worthwhile. Well being comes from having a web of relationships and interests. Family and friends, agencies and communities all can increase our well being. Our relationships also provide for our most basic human needs. While helping us to have a fulfilling life, our relationships help us to live our lives to the fullest potential. Through our relationships, we are sustained in our personal growth and development. Our relationships are the substance to how each of us grow and interact with each other. The relationship substance strengthens our bonds and builds trust. As we grow, we learn from life experiences after leaving our parents.
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.%26quot;
I'll shorten it to one paragraph: %26quot;I GOT YOUR BACK.%26quot;
Can someone please edit my essay?
Ask one of your friends gosh or dont you have anyserver lock file
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.
Can someone please edit my essay?
%26quot;Our collective well being is improved if we live in a peaceful, flourishing, supportive society, so promoting well being should be a public as well as a personal task. Well being is more than just happiness. It is about having meaning in our lives, developing as a person and feeling that our lives are fulfilling and worthwhile. Well being comes from having a web of relationships and interests. Family and friends, agencies and communities all can increase our well being. Our relationships also provide for our most basic human needs. While helping us to have a fulfilling life, our relationships help us to live our lives to the fullest potential. Through our relationships, we are sustained in our personal growth and development. Our relationships are the substance to how each of us grow and interact with each other. The relationship substance strengthens our bonds and builds trust. As we grow, we learn from life experiences after leaving our parents.
Re-enforcement of values is what makes us who we are as individuals. For example, support and confidence from others helps to mold us into being a positive part of society. What makes individuals who they are is contributed by everyone who has helped and guided that person. Relationships play a central role throughout our lives although the family structure may maybe different for every individual. Whether our family structure is composed of one or both parents, or other family members, strong support from others is important for that individuals鈥?well-being.
But just as human relationships with others and our family is essential for our well being so is trust. Trust impact everyone. It affects the quality of every relationship, every communication, and every effort in which we are engaged. The ability to establish, grow, extend and restore trust is not only vital to our personal and interpersonal well being but for the community as well. I believe that within each of every individual is the ability to reach our full potential and change the world, one person at a time. We must start with ourselves. We seek to act with integrity in our own lives, fostering trust in our relationships with family, clients, and community. As people鈥檚 lives become more purposeful, fulfilled and happy, so this makes a positive change in how they interact with those around them, and these in turn affect others. As a result of this, one person living their life in accordance with who they really are can, in a sense, bring positive change to the world. Each and every one of us can come to realize that he or she, no matter how insignificant or helpless he may feel-is in a position to change the world. We must all begin with ourselves; if we wait for someone else, none of us will ever see any change. And it is not true that it is impossible: even the most powerless among us has his own willpower, and at the same time this is perhaps the only thing that no one can take away from us. Whoever applies it may achieve something. So, I want to as a person who is concerned about the well being of others to give them a ray of hope. I want to give individuals that are marginalized and vulnerable hope that they can accomplish things.%26quot;
I'll shorten it to one paragraph: %26quot;I GOT YOUR BACK.%26quot;
Can someone please edit my essay?
Ask one of your friends gosh or dont you have any
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